It’s funny
how we seem to think that physical pain
can overshadow emotional anguish.
The torment of our souls
fills us to overflowing
and we crave its release so completely
that we feel the only way to get relief is by letting it out.
It’s in our pores,
our sinew,
our “blood.”
But the momentary sting of the scalpel
brings no reprieve from what ails us;
and the scars left behind only serve to remind us
that once again
we have failed.
I have learned instead;
to drip my sorrows onto pure white pages.
To stain eternity with the wretchedness of my woes.
I have written the secrets of my soul,
invited others to share my heartache.
Only then does the glut of grief ease.
I am a poet;
and I have not suffered in vain.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
June 13, 2004
Author notes
Inspired by "Blood" by hobbitscanfly.
I don't know if this falls under "very, very, very good free style" but I'm submiting it for your consideration.
Thank you,
Patti
Written June 13th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Cutting Away The Hurt by Burning Roses.
408 points, ended June 19, 2004, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hey! this is brilliant! it is very very very good freestlye! i like it! well done! great write! love lulu xxx
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Yep! I agree it's what we do, express emotions not just to show how we are feeling, but to place thoughts and images into the readers mind on how they may have felt at some stage.
Good piece.
Jules -
Well, it is very deep. But it is kind of like every other poem in this contest. But that I cannot blame you for. It is very hard to make them all sound different on a particular subject like cutting. I think you did very well, though. I applaud your effort.
~writer13 -
Incredible
Ha ha, what did I tell you. Simple magnificent, as others have so clearly stated. Your words deserve more than a gold medal. Again, I am honored that you were inspired by my piece to write this. Wonderful job, though I think you already knew that.
~Liadan -
This is quite an amazing piece..so very well expressed..it reminds me of myself..how I have learned to release and express my thoughts in better ways..you have done an excellent job with this..good luck in the contest..and thank you for commenting on my write "Family" I appreciate it...
~~Kristy -
great
Excellent write. I love the truth within the words. The writer's expression of pain the pure white pages. The many hours put forth to create the minds song of worded phrase for the world to see and read. Great write. I loved it.
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well written
my favorite line from your poem is "drip my sorrows onto pure white pages." I agree with you that we all pour our hearts out writing poems. -
This is an amazing piece. I seriously mean that. This is very very good. I enjoy reading it. I thank you so much for sharing it too. Keep up the good job and God bless you too
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Wow..... great write.. and it forces its reader to really step back and think. I'm lovin it.. great images, beautiful flow.. all good things. I wish u best in that contest.. U get a gold in my eyes. haha..
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