I woke up
Out of a sound sleep
To make sure I still had all of my fingers.
I don't know if that means I'm crazy
Or just extra careful.
I dug through
To the bottom of the garbage can
To make sure the wasp I had swatted was still dead.
I don't know if that means I'm psychotic
Or just a little paranoid.
I videotaped
Myself sleep for five hours
To make sure I didn't cease to exist during the night.
I don't know if that means I'm deranged
Or just deeply disciplined.
I asked my
History teacher if the past ACTUALLY happened
To make sure the world wasn't just playing some prank on me.
I don't know if that means I'm an idiot
Or just a bit intimidated.
I rung my hands
Around my neck and squeezed until my head popped off
To make sure I didn't let somebody else get the best of me.
I don't know if that means that I'm erratic.....
But I do know that you don't know either.
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))) make of this what you will (((
Written June 14th, 2004
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awesome write ....i've often thought of asking my history teacher if the past really happened ....but anyways i've only read a few of your poems as of now and i think you are an excellent author
~HEATHER~
*Live everyday likes it's your last ....cuz it might very well be* -
God i feel that way all the time.. I am soo curious to know if there is something hidden behind all of my beliefs, or my life... i always get these what if questions in my head and they just get louder and louder untill i stop ceasing to do something about it...
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So besides hoping that you are taking the world by storm as some graphics artist.. I also love your twisted little mind.. Catressa
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WEll done this is a good write and by the way I absoulty LOVE your backgrounds everyone of them is simply devine!
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Hehe, I'm glad you perceived it that way because I wasn't in too terrible of a "deep mood" when I wrote it. Just letting the thoughts flow and letting them do what they will as I morph them into words. Oh, and it's easy to be original when I'm writing from the heart.... I think it'd be harder for me to write unoriginally and end up liking it. Thanks for the comment!!!
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A killer write. You have an awesome taste of originality, bro. I also see a sense of humor hidden in all of this. My favorite lines (because I've wondered the same myself ).
I asked my
History teacher if the past ACTUALLY happened
To make sure the world wasn't just playing some prank on me.
So cool.
. To me this poem really has (despite it's difference, you've catagorized it well) a hint of humor! I have to admit I wasn't left bewildered by the poem, and found myself smiling a few times.
Great write,
Claide
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Well I've written a few other poems about paranoia... but I just felt they were lacking anything extra. This poem was as easy to write as thinking about whatever comes to mind is. I'm glad I let myself have fun with it instead of trying to force my mind to make something formatically, or meterically brilliant. If other people like it too I'll write more like this. (or try at least)
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This is so very cool... where the hell did you get the idea for this, I am stumped! Keep dreaming in ink.
~*Divine*~ -
I really liked this. I feel this way sometimes.. But then, I KNOW I'm insane, so I guess it's acceptable- or maybe not. LOL.
I videotaped
Myself sleep for five hours
To make sure I didn't cease to exist during the night.
I don't know if that means I'm deranged
Or just deeply disciplined
I loved that verse. It was both funny, and a little scary because I've actually thought about video taping myself in my sleep to see what happens... Pure poetry my friend, pen on. -
Awesome again, Greg! Gotta say, this is a fantastic write! I know how some of this feels, that's for sure. The picture scares me...
Love this poem!
*huggles*
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I luv this, you are such a talented writer, this is another exceptional piece. It flows beautifully, and i think i'm going to scroll up and read it again, i'll be waiting for your next write.
tania -
Lol... I'll fix that. I just think it's hilairious that I misspelled such an easy word right next to the word, "idiot"!!! Oh my I'll be laughing for a while about that. Hehehe
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GREAT WRITE!! Loved it! And that's so true - for who truly knows another! You can know them and know them well but to truly know them you'd have to BE them As for typos - only one PT - tsk tsk! I'm "an" idiot not I'm "and" idiot
Still as always a good write - bloody creepy pic though - that damn squishy fish with lots of arms has VERY creepy eyes!!!!!! -
I changed "psycho" to "psychotic", I hope that's a better word 'cause I really wanted a "P" word to fit there because the last words of the last two lines of each stanza were supossed to start with the same letter. But I'm super glad you liked this, it's just a bunch of completely random thoughts and I didn't even know what I was writing them for until I finished. Thanks for the comment!!!
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i love it. the lines at the end were just so beautiful and perfect. they reminded me of a timid child, and i loved them all. the lines:
"I don't know if that means I'm crazy
Or just extra careful."
were extra rad. they made me smile. the poem is just great. the word "psycho" in the second stanza thing did sound a little wierd though, but i might just be not used to hearing it enough.
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