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Silencer

 

Suicide
Is undemocratic, usually

 

But stillness is not an effort
To prevent the preventor of happiness
Or to avoid ‘the pain’ of unjust voting
Rather, it is an end to wanting the pain to end.

 

It is the ‘eternal lose’ of locus to focus on rain.
It is redirection,
Deconstruction of
Elsewhere

and
Everywhere
An end to fear of fear
Like a cactus savior

 

Location, location, location
One callous on one foot, or on one heart
One door pilots the cause of blood-drop
One door opens when another closes, right! 

 

But the 'Sway Station'
Yes
The strain against stains on stain, oh yesssssss!
The present pain traded for the anonymous pain

 

So cheers
And
Here’s to drinking with
One-legged ideas

EGO

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Edging
God
Out
Written June 11th, 2004

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  • John Yelling
    May 16, 2005
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    oh almost forgot, great title too.


  • John Yelling
    May 16, 2005
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    Wow, great poem, I had to read it twice, not so much because I didn't get it but because the first time was to think about(takes a lot for me, trust me), the second time, to just enjoy it, the words, the flow, the ideas behind it all.

    " to avoid ‘the pain’ of unjust voting" I love this line and the meaning behind it. I wish I could say more but seeing how it's only noon, I just got up and I have yet to have my first beer, I am having a hard time thinking. Great job though.


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    October 16, 2004
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    I always appreciate your comments. You may not feel this way (I know it is not up to me to decide what you do or do not feel) but I feel we are Kindred Souls of some sort. There's only a few I feel that way about here. It's one of the blessings of delving into the poetic psyche of self...to discover another self.
    Peace Through Love & working into the sunlight of the spirit. Timo


  • pulsating
    October 15, 2004
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    I can't believe
    I haven't read
    this one.
    silencer is one
    of my favorite words
    in the english language
    actually. reminds me of
    a movie actually called
    the station agent. don't know why,
    just does. About three lost souls
    who come together. Maybe the mention
    of station but it's something more than that,
    the philosophical understanding inscribed.
    I once again get the jist but not the full swing.
    Lately i've the feeling has been coming out a bit more
    and able to focus with reading too a little better.
    Must be the ADD is under control. LOL anyway
    it's like some kind of epiphany through the written word.
    If I could just feel out there in daytime. Or if the emotions could be matched up. I really enjoy your musings and your newest installment was lovely as well. Take care...Olivia


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    September 24, 2004
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    OK, that does it. I just figured I am just eccentric. Looks like I'll have to get off of my duff and write another poem that has been growing in my heart for awhile. Thanks, Viuda Negra. PTL ET

  • the blinding Son
    September 24, 2004
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    damn good

    you know you never have any bad selection in wording and idea over all. this took the breath away and silenced my need for any more aplause than that which has been bestowed. how do you come up with this stuff...mann!


  • misselaineous
    July 11, 2004
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    lost in the moment ~and reflecting on the idea of the democracy of suicide. I am not sure I can answer it! I related to the poem in many respects and i love the way you have said:

    The present pain traded for the anonymous pain

    so sad but so true
    an excellent poem written with insight and integrity x
    heres to all the unsuccessful attempts

    elaine


  • Joshuacrisel
    July 9, 2004
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    Very good write I liked it alot you have alot of talent this was really said and yes it was good as well i could realte to this in alot of ways and it was quite sad because i hate it when i feel like this and i don't know it was a very good write though and i really liked the background too it was really cool, anyways more about the poem thats wat was really good i really liked it alot good write and i will be reading more of your work


  • Nyx Iscariot
    June 27, 2004
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    i think, when you reside at Sway Station, you forget to see what's beyond the terminal, and you live in that second, forgetting even yourself.

    its like a journey, that, being too hard, you fail to complete. its just like that, edging god out, closing doors that would probably help you, had you of left them open, and not lost the key.

    if only we could rewind time, to find those little keys.

    N...


  • yourbentangel
    June 23, 2004
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    AHHHHHHHH

    It is so noce to read someone else's point of view and know that they are maybe not as sure as I think I should be!!!! Did any of that make any sense to you? I sure hope so, I thought this to be terrific, refreshing and brilliantly worded.
    Thank you so, so much


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    June 23, 2004
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    Do I assume that you are in touch with another group of people whose habits and injuries are of poetic reflection to you?
    It seems so. That is so good! It takes 30 years to re-check. 40 years to re-make. 50 years to 'see' the pattern, and 55 years to observe the answer to a prophetic tapping from when we are 7!
    God's always been there, and it's the whispers we weren't listening to.......Too Much Hard Rock pumped into our speakers!! hahhaa


    Good write. I soooooooooooooo related! Thank you.

  • SwollenHeart
    June 21, 2004
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    Thought Provoking!

    Howdy ET!
    I like your work! I like the style, It is a bit confusing for me,And I consider maybe it's because of my young age of thirteen,((going on fourteen!!!)) but I do think I grasped the flow, and the idea. Mind,I do understand most of it,I'm not totally in the dark! ^-^ Keep writing! I enjoy your work,it keeps me thinking!


  • June 20, 2004
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    So cheers
    And
    Here’s to drinking with
    One-legged ideas

    This is brillianly layered and complex, I wont pretend to have grasped the full meaning but I did get much out of it. I love the multifacited nature of your wording. Excellent work.

    an.d


  • Carole Dudley
    June 20, 2004
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    "Whether to take arms against a sea of trouble...." (thanks, Bill) The perennial task of poets is to try to break through that door and find out which has greater value - life or decomposition. Unfortunately, built into the flesh, is a great desire to keep on keeping on, and by running, or diverting your swim through space improve your lot. Seek pleasure and avoid pain. The first rule, right? Hanging ourselves on iron hooks of angst to flap in the wind eternally-guilty and self-abhoring -seems like the wrong way to spend our few minutes of breath. Now that I am good for nothing anymore, I strongly suspect that it doesn't matter a fig if we are good or bad. (Rationalization?)-- The only thing that matters is that we are pleased to be plucking the petals from a daisy while in the prison of our present incarnation. Makes no sense? Grin. Waxing philosophical is not exactly a proper way to critique this fine write, but I guess it was so good that you really got me thinking. Thanks!
    Edited on Jun 20, 2:21 p.m. because ''.

  • susanne
    June 14, 2004
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    Thought provoking - extraordinary work!!

  • spacekake
    June 13, 2004
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    This is a mind-bender--it reminds me a little of a convoluted road, one that meanders for a moment, then twists back, over and over again, to the same place. I'm not sure where it's headed, but I enjoyed this read all the same.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    June 13, 2004
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    This is a brilliantly penned piece. Very deep and dark. Even the background blends perfectly with the words. As I was reading this and scanning across the background I couldn't help but get that same goose bump, looking-over-your-shoulder feel when I read a Dean Koontz novel. If someone could figure out how to actually make fog spread across a web page...reading this would have been very trippy. That's the image I had in my head. Okay...enough brain picking! This was excellent. I enjoyed it immensely. I've had my thrill for the day, so I'm good to go. Thanks!

  • l8nblazed
    June 13, 2004
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    incredible

    FINALLY a good write(not some suicidal kids yelling about nothing..) i dont know the meaning.. but a good write to me, means alot to me when i read it.. and it did.. i feel this for my own reasons.. and it takes a poet this good to make me see things from other angles........wes

  • Ivorie
    June 12, 2004
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    The strain against stains on stain, oh yesssssss!
    The present pain traded for the anonymous pain

    those were beautiful lines. The slippery sound of the first, the parallel form of the second.

    There were gems of ideas I caught through the foggy background.

    Merci~


  • MuseStalker
    June 12, 2004
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    excellent

    Hmmmm....of all, I think I'm most in love with "drinking with one-legged ideas". It reminds me of those inebriated moments of certitude I've known (in my liquor fogged youth) of the meaning of life and the reason for existence. Yup. It holds all that mind-bending allure, too. Hmmmm...is that patchoulli I smell....well, maybe not. Yeah....its the 70s again....and, I was so much smarter then, donchano, than I am today. Wait. Didn't someone else say that before me? Hmmm....maybe not. Oh, well. Pass the tequilla and damn the torpedoes. The only way out is through. Oh...and, in case you're wondering....I love this.


  • Blondita
    June 12, 2004
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    If I had half a brain ET I might understand this ! Or rather - be able to decipher the intricacies of....I always appreciate poetry that makes me THINK or feel...or when they are very personal and you can relate to the emotion being expressed.

    The background itself could speak a thousand words.

    A very angsty write - sounds like a silent agony of sorts - with some bitterness and sarcasm thrown in for an extra sting.

    We can only save ourselves though - it all starts within...

    Enjoyed it.

    ~ sonia ~ X

  • squidney
    June 11, 2004
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    this is very deep with a nice background as well. especially enjoyed
    "But the 'Sway Station'
    Yes
    The strain against stains on stain, oh yesssssss!
    The present pain traded for the anonymous pain"
    Again, very much enjoyed this.keep up the good work

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