A kiss, the song's begun
The tune is gently played
No sweeter ever sung
This love song serenade
Arms bind us to each other
Solo becomes duet
Heart strings strum together
Our musical vignette
Your hips sway to music
When I'm between your thighs
Your lips sing the lyrics
In soft, staccato sighs
Our voices now are one
We join in harmony
Our bodies have become
A joyful symphony
The song we sing so slow
The words we love to say
The notes we all do know
The music bodies play
Author notes
Written June 11th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Iohagh's Birthday Party Over Here by Abdul T Alishtari.
300 points, ended December 25, 2005, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Perfect description of two becoming one....
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very romantic
You always have a way with your word, Especially when it comes to your love poems. This is a wonderful piece of work.
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Nicely sung Leo. Good job here. Love C
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Very Moving
A man's soul can show through his writing. His heart is bared for all to see. These words are very moving to me & show the intense feeling that a man & woman can share.. Very good work.. Loved it. -
This is like remembering
of how bodies sing
and do that thing
that makes men kings.
Thanks for your gift. Happy Xmas -
You will make her so happy. Iohagh's uncle.
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excellent write...
well, my dear friend, I have to agree with Michelle above...you really know how to make a woman swoon......excellent imagery here...swp -
wrapped around the soul
sigh..............you do know how to make a womans heart swoon so that her whole being follows.
~Michelle~
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Great
Great, Great. This work is so good, in the way that you presented it cleverly. This poem is really expressed and shows a lot of feeling. I personally think this poem has a good specific amount of energy written within this. I enjoyed this poem and i was happy to let you no how good this poem was to me. -
Lovely, you really are a true romantic!
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Wow..this is a really great poem..so romantic.
I really like your work. -
leo2,
Excellence in motion!
I truly loved this as I am a music lover as well as a body's symphony fine tuned to my husband's baritone conduction of our own songs that we make consistantly. Beautiful read!
Madame Mystery
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Your hips sway to music
When I'm between your thighs
Your lips sing the lyrics
In soft, staccato sighs
This is one amazing poem. YOu make romantic love sound so...romantic in a nice way,not in the mush department.
. Loved this.
Keep writing.
Kannika -
I know you won a gold with this...without any fancy, pretty stuff....but it would enhance it for the readers. I'd strongly recommend some pretty stuff surrounding the amazing poem you have written. It will attract readers who need that. I know you like people to comment on the words alone, but people have 5 senses...and they use all of them.
This is a wonderful use of your writing skills.
Cheryl
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rocking
This was a brilliant write,the whole poem flowed very well.I love how you incorporated love and sex,but it wasn't in your face at all.Very well done.xxshadowxx -
Wow this was really really awesome! you did a very good job congrats!
-April
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this is very nice
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I love this. I love the love that it exudes. This was different than anything else I have read. You have quite a good way with words.
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You surely deserve the rich applause this piece has garnered. It is lyrical and precise in a very smooth and soothing way. Did I see it won a trophy? Well deserved!
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Perfect
Leo this is such a dreamy poem. This is stunningly beautiful. I love the symphony I hear in the background of my mind as I read this.
~Lyrical
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Bodies
Complete a virtuoso performance
Within words
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Ohhh... I so envy the rhyme qnd meter and the molodic feel of this poem! It is wonderful in every way! You've stunned me eith the sheer beauty of this piece! Great poem and best of wishes as well... ~genielassie~
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Very nice piece Leo! Glad to see you won your first gold with it. Congratulations!
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This is a very good poem, I really liked it. I am very new to this site and I am just getting around. I like the words you paint on the screen here. I close my eyes and I can hear the music and see the dance.
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Very sensual and lovely poem! All the lines are beautiful, but I really liked the 'solo becomes duet'. It is so much pleasanter to sing in two voices
Congratulations on your gold Leo! I'm sure many others will follow!
Mari
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wow great poem!!!
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desriptive and flowing...awesome write, i like it a lot! byez
~karinn -random person-
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HELP! I`m melting away!!! From the music that is displayed! xoxo
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Another good one, yeah it can be good sometimes and such an eclectic mix.
If music be the food of love
then buy me a stack system.
Jules -
Varooooom!
Another masterpiece! -
I love to dance so this definitely attracted my attention.
Good job Leo...
Your hips sway to music
When I'm between your thighs
Your lips sing the lyrics
In soft, staccato sighs
Very sexy and sensuous image there...
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sigh ................
simply beautiful and very well written
specially liked the stanza..
The song we sing so slow
The words we love to say
The notes we all do know
The music bodies play...
lekha
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Now that's MY kind'a music! lol Great write! This is really lovely! And the metaphor is perfect! Lovely, as always!
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OHHHHHH,
This was very romantic. I found it quite inspiring.
Very well wriiten, nice images and excellent flow.
You make me want to dance with you -
outstanding
Leo, I can close my eyes and feel the rythmn, I can hear the words that are spoken and dream of other moments like this again. -
Beautiful
wow this is a great poem. one that you can tell that you put this together with your heart. augh so good. 2 thumbs up... keep writing Scar -
wow i defintaly love tis one. no kidding. the rythum to it, is amazing, and your words always paint a wonderful picture. kep the amazing work flowing
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gentle , loving , sensual, seductive.....and lots more. Your words described this scenario so beautiful ( there is so much more in a write like this than that awful explicit pornstuff with the f word thrown it for impact )
Reenie
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gentle , loving , sensual, seductive.....and lots more. Your words described this scenario so beautiful ( there is so much more in a write like this than that awful explicit pornstuff with the f word thrown it for impact )
Reenie
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WOW leo this is awesome, simply awesome! I love how you brought the music out of the love between two people. As you read it and see it..you also feel it!! Great write..xoxoxo
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excellent
I totally loved this piece. It swayed along to it's own tune bringing the reader right along with it. The form rythm and rhyme are great, fitting perfectly with the sentiments expressed in the poem. Excellent write.
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