This sky is blackened
As in my dreams.
A raven breaks free
From his chain-link bracelets
Into the dark
Of the blackened night.
He soar galleantly
Over darken hills
Down blackened canyons
All withh ease.
He spread my wings
Rise high into the night
Hopeing to see light
He starts to fall and awake abruptly.
This sky is blackened
As in my dreams.
Author notes
This is to all those who felt there's no escape from life.
Written June 11th, 2004
A contest entry
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Such a dark dark poem i love ravens hehe anyways this is a really great write...I have always loved reading dark poetry and this is one of the best that I have read anyways good luck
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this was a truly dark, and I hope all you dreams aren't like this. this was a very nice poem. thanks for entering.
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this was truly dark, i read it a couple of times trying to get a grip on what was going on. my interpretation is you are the raven totally free in your dreams to fly and soar getting away from all the turmoil going on in your waking world. only waking to find yourself still in a intolerable sitiuation. freedom in dreams, bondage in wakefulness -
Great Poem!...I LOVE IT!!..It's awesome..wow I wish I could write like this!..I GIVE IT 2 THUMBS UP!!!!...Laterz!!!!!..Keep up the good work and keep writing!...Laterz
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Very vivid picture you paint here with your words. Great little poem you have here. Thanks for entering the contest. Keep it up. Best of luck.
~Miranda
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A raven breaks free
From his chain-link bracelets
Into the dark
Of the blackened night.
I loved this stanza!! You created pictures within the reader's mind, lovely job hun.
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