Shrouded,
turmoil abounding
as the demons dance
clouding lucid thought
breath stolen,
choking on pain
bound, in their web of deceit
caught, in the liar's snare
pricked mercilessly
by venomous, sharpened words
from hollow beings
Lost in the dance,
as the devil,
softly spoken,
whispers sweet nothings
into anxious ears
and watches, smiling
as you beat yourself
with despair.
Wrapped in his arms,
your Sun is eclipsed.
Fall away, into the void
your center awaits:
beckoning from your corner
of the universe
showing the way
silencing the black wind
that clouds your thoughts
time comes to a crawl,
and only you remain.
The journey awaits you
with open arms.
Stepping softly,
yet you need not be hesitant
just follow the light.
Author notes
This doesn't seem to be finished yet
Written June 10th, 2004
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Arkhayne~
Hey! I thought that this was a really good poem. It was nicely written and it had a good flow to it as well. I agree with you when you said it doesn't seem finished. Good other than that though. Keep writing adn thank you for sharing this with all of us here.
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excells beyond words
wow,excellent poem,i really felt this one,and such description!! greatly written piece!! as always,your poetry touches my soul and makes me feel so many things!! your poetry panits an interesting story all the time hugs poetic janis
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excells beyond words
wow,excellent poem,i really felt this one,and such description!! greatly written piece!! as always,your poetry touches my soul and makes me feel so many things!! your poetry panits an interesting story all the time hugs poetic janis
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Such beautiful carved masterpiece etch forever into my mind. That is what your work so far has done my friend. I can only say that I wish that I had as much talent as you. I am going to look at a couple more poems, and then I am heading off to sleep myself.
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excellent
A true masterpiece. You know I'm trying to think of a word that will fit but amazing and astounding don't seem good enough. That's it! I've got it! Perfect, nope it's more than perfect, sorry I'm an amateur, I'll just say you're as good as Robert Frost. How's that?
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fucking hell yet another amazing song dont know where you get these words from its brilliant well done oh if you like music check out some tunes by a british rapper/urban poet called the streets at www.the-streets.co.uk may not be your thing but scope it out believe.
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as always, this is really nice. you have a unique way of using discription matched with narroration that i love. glad to see you around here, i'm out, but i will defenitly read the rest of your stuff soon.
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Im reading it from a very bad state of mind...luckily though
its usually short term and it will pass...
Shrouded,
turmoil abounding
as the demons dance
clouding lucid thought -
wow, to you it may not be finished but this is great hun. really deep. Bravo hun
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