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'Delivered'

You are like a tidal surge
a klondike boulder to emerge
 ~~as ~~
God shall blunt the blade that sears,
from His might to pluck the fears
 ~~ and~~
you-an ocean's hidden bloom
from your grim impending doom
    ~~ dear ~~
stay surrendered, keep Him first
'til this tangled dark be cursed!

(Dedicated to T. W.--Jadegreen eyes....my friend in battle)

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Written May 8th, 2002

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  • quaneefah
    July 25, 2005
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    Thank You CookieZeal very honest. just what I thought also just wrote last night. I will revise and you can tell me how it comes out. I appreciate your thought.Your not brutal at all. How was Just Like You Too it is being published in American Poetry Anthology.
  • a daily facade
    November 27, 2003
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    i love how compact this poem is. in just 8 lines you shared a life. that is awesome. i really like the strong ending. oh, by the way, thanks for the comment on 'the edge' and i did finally finish it. taking your advice.

  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    September 29, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    God. Love. God. Love. God. Love. God. God. Love. God. Love. God. Love. God. God. Love. God. Love. God. Love. God.God. Love. God. Love. God. Love. God. God loved us first.

  • gecko
    May 28, 2002
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    excellent

    very beautifully done Cookie
    smiles
    hugs

  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    May 28, 2002
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    You're right...Changed it twice. Think it's right this time..hehehe. Thanks
    Edited by CookieZeal on right now because 'misspell'.

  • stephanie sunshine
    May 28, 2002
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    neutral

    sure you picked the right 'seer'/sear?
    that line leaves me a little confused, as is.

  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    May 14, 2002
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    It can't. God's ocean floats us up. Our choice. We are meant to be edified. Isn't that a magnificent encouragement?? Thank you, kojak,.....for that concept and poetic extention.//// Thank you all for your comments and ratings. Love, CookieZEAL

  • kojak24
    May 14, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    'You are like a tidal surge
    a klondike boulder to emerge'
    From deep within I feel a surge
    of power and glory merged.
    What will happen to the urge
    when it lies dormant, submerged?
    Edited by kojak24 on May 14.
  • Paul B
    May 9, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    I see you are well polished. It is a pleasure

  • May 8, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    Lovely work ... concise and appealing, with a sense of the traditional as well. Hehehe, hope that makes sense! ;)
  • mojoquix
    May 8, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    beautiful.. lovely flow and diction.

  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    May 8, 2002
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    Thank you all sooooo much. ...and the surprising rating! Your specification on 'why' you like it makes it even more valuable! CookieZeal

  • introubleintx silver member
    May 8, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    Excellent dedication! Hope that you share it with him! :)

  • nell
    May 8, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    an amazing piece you has here
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