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Dance With Me Daddy

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She was born with a smile.
And I vowed she'd live in style.
But her glossy eyes looked my way
And I swore I could hear my baby girl say,
Daddy , do you love your little girl?
Will you dance with me,
Take me in your arms
And give me a little twirl?
When I'd come home late in the evening
She'd always meet me by our gate gleaming.
But I'd be too tired to play,
So I'd send my little girl away.
Daddy , do you love your little girl?
Will you dance with me,
Take me in your arms
And give me a little twirl?
A dance that delighted my little girl
Was being held at her high school.
She'd asked me if I'd go.
But I had much to do and I said no.
Daddy, do you love your little girl?
Will you dance with me,
Take me in your arms
And give me a little twirl?
Much to my grief and regret
She went with a boy I hadn't met.
One day, she came home and made me very sad.
A baby had been given to her by that lad.
Daddy, do you love your little girl?
Will you dance with me,
Take me in your arms
And give me a little twirl?
It was then I could plainly see
She had sought the love not given by me.
I tried to take her in my arms and give her a twirl.
But it was too late. I had lost my little girl.
Daddy, do you love your little girl?
Will you dance with me,
Take me in your arms
And give me a little twirl?

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Inspired by Cat's in the Cradle and my passion that Dad's spend time with their children.
Written June 10th, 2004

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  • CountryCousin
    February 29, 2008

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    I hope.

    I can only hope and trust that the relationship is on its way to being repaired.Always let her know that even though this has happened you still love her. That is one dance you do not want to miss.


    • melphleg gold member
      February 29, 2008
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      Thanks, but I've never been married and have no children. I do hope the dad's out there will dance.


  • maralisa silver member
    February 26, 2008
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    this is a fantastic poem and the couras goe with it well i love it good luck in the contest


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    February 16, 2008

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    Brillant lyrics that truly reach deep into anyones soul and heart ... It is sad when a child feels they need to find the love and comfort in another persons arms

    ♥
    Thank you for your entry
    Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda

  • imahealer
    February 3, 2008

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    I MUST add you to my fav's. We were a family with money, but dysfunctional is a mild word. The boys father was NEVER there for them, and never joined in any of their accomplishments. I was mother and father. Taught them values, how to play football, soccer, and coached, taught them about sex and how to be careful. Now they are all success in life. Love your poem and the way you used the chorus! Very effective!
    Shana


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    February 2, 2008

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    WOW!! This is such a wonderful write, your words are beautiful thankyou for sharing, Be well and all the best


  • HeavenScent4U
    February 2, 2008

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    This is very touching yet very sad Yes I agreee that even not spending time like this with your child even if you love them and are a loving parent is a kind of neglect. It makes me sad because it makes me think of my daughter, 17 and 1/2 and hasn't heard a word from her father in a little over 3 years. In the beginning there might have been room for a small excuse but as the years have passed, there is no excuse anymore I asked her the other day if she wanted to write her father a letter, she asked me why. I told her that if she did, I would send it to his sister's house. She sadly said, "Mom, no I really don't have anything to say" Sad because before this all happened, she was the apple of his eye Best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed


  • magloveschrist
    February 1, 2008
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    good

    wow that was amazing i woah holy cow. this is an inspiring peice. thanks for the insperation


  • sassylibra0074
    February 1, 2008

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    A very moving piece indeed. I love the use of repitition too, best of luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.


  • rufina caraid gold member
    August 4, 2004
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    A very touching and realistic poem. I cannot listen to the song that inspired your poem (which I prefer by the way) - I just don't like the song at all - always turn off the radio.
    How soon Daddy becomes Dad, Mommy becomes Mom - those formative years are so precious.
    Thanks for your entry - it's superb.
    ~Von~


  • loualoui
    August 1, 2004
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    I love that song 'Cats in the Cradle' and I was thinking of it as I read your poem. As with the song, you have conveyed one of the most important messages about parenting... childhood is so precious and fleeting; we can't afford to waste that valuable time by being too busy for our children.

    A beautifully poignant write here. Well done!

    ~ Louise


  • qnhoneybee
    July 31, 2004
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    This was beautifully written although very sad. It held a tremendous impact that I don't think anyone could walk away not feeling something from. Father's do have make a huge difference in their children's life. You have sent out a wonderful message here that I think all father's should read. I liked the style that you wrote this is as well. I could feel a rythmn with it.

    Thank-you for entering! Good-Luck!

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    July 30, 2004
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    Unfortunately there are far too many fathers that do not take the time for their children. I know the first thing that comes to mind to many are those children from divorced or seperated couples. Yet, in the two parent households were all looks so very great and peachy from the outside...it isn't the case on the insiade. Too many father's seem to be defined by how many material things their family has and how well they provide for them and miss the real picture... that all those hours trying to earn money to buy happiness could have truly given happiness...their presence, and knowing their children.

    A fine write. Thanks for entering and best of wishes as well... ~genielassie~

  • melphleg gold member
    July 30, 2004
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    It's something I feel very strongly about - Father's spending time with their children. I know the damage that can be done when they don't.


  • FlawedDestiny
    July 30, 2004
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    I think this is really sad having been there myself, not as the father of course. I really liked this, but I felt it all too much. Good luck to you in the contest.
    ~*Destiny*~


  • SilentScar
    June 24, 2004
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    Excellent

    I think this is an excellent poem. The refrain,
    "Daddy ,
    Do you love your little girl?
    Will you dance with me,
    Take me in your arms
    And give me a little twirl?,"
    shows the child-like human actions and thoughts. It's a touching peice. Keep up the good work.
    SilentScar


  • Pierre Richards
    June 24, 2004
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    excellent!

    You have spoken a strong and important truth here! So many kids want their parents love and affections and do not get them, just like the song Cats in the Cradle" spoke of. Well said!

  • lilLarzUlrich
    June 24, 2004
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    Very well written

    Oh my god that was beautiful, i love it, it was so touching and so heart touching to read its great keep writing!

  • XBloody CandyX
    June 24, 2004
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    Wow, very good. You have some talent there! I wish I could write in that type of genre. It dosn't work for meh x_x, well, good job!


  • WarmHeart
    June 24, 2004
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    this is so touching and amazing and beautiful! i luv the words, the emotions, the whole thing!
    great write!
    kaz xx


  • Touchof1der silver member
    June 24, 2004
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    Bravo! This is so touching and so beautiful. What a wonderful way to deliever such a powerful message. Thank you for sharing this. It was a pleasure and a privilege to read you.

  • melphleg gold member
    June 23, 2004
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    You're wish has been granted. I posted "See Me" and it's sister poem "Listen to Me" enjoy. Thanks for the encouragement.


  • June 22, 2004
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    ohhhhhhh,,beautiful job!! Just beautiful!! another age old desire,,wanting to be seen,,and this time,,it was the little gitl crying out. I really am enjoying all your works. Keep up the great job there!! Can't wait for you to post "see me",,the one you shared with me privately!! It is so awesome & I want you to post it!! Beautiful write there! Take care!! bravo!!


  • melphleg gold member
    June 10, 2004
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    Thank you for your comment.

  • MoonDreamer
    June 10, 2004
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    I love Cat's in the Cradle. Very poignant and melancholy and something many can relate to. Kids need dads I think. Good write.

  • melphleg gold member
    June 10, 2004
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    Thanks. I did not mean to put the poem in the authors comments opps. I coulda sworn I had a different comment. Oh well, I change it now. The repetition is the chorus.

  • pozo
    June 10, 2004
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    I like the repetition and the way you carry it on into the authors comments. This poem reminds me of aging and a loss of innocence.

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