It was too bright so I flipped off the light switch.
And there in the dark stood the Halloween Witch.
She looked at me with big eyes of blue.
I threw something at her, I think it was a shoe.
The witch flew away on her broom.
At the speed of light all we heard was ZOOM!
Author notes
I wrote this when I was five I'm eight now. I hope this is good for your contest.
Written June 8th, 2004
A contest entry
- Halloween Fiends by Frogzter.
300 points, ended October 3, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This was really cute,
I will have to look to the sky this halloween and see if
I see her zooming on her broom
Trick or Treat
Frozentearz -
This is perfect for this contest and quite a nice piece from one so young, especially since you wrote it at the tender age of 5! Keep penning my young poet!
Thanks for sharing and entering!
Frog~ -
Trick or Treat!
BOO! Screams the Ghost!
Hehehehehehehehehehehehehhe! Hackled the Witch!
AwwwOOOOOOOooooo! Howled the Werewolf!
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keep writing, you're so good now, one day you'll be amazing I'm sure and later you'll be phenomenal. great job!
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Tyler this was a great little story-poem. It seems that you are a natural talent, just like your mom. Very well crafted work of art. I love Halloween, it's my oldest son's birthday. He's a real big boy now, he is 30. Keep writing LittleBrother!
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Nice work, it makes me smile
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This is very entertaining, a well told tale! Your rhymes are very good, and the meter is pretty good, too. I really liked the way you used the same letter for "big eyes of blue". I enjoyed this, you have written a nice poem. Thanks for entering our contest.
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nice poem, well written, nice rhyming too.
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nyce N short
nice rhyme.its cool,rock on -
Have mom read you some childrens poems and she you can tell her which one you like best. Cheryl
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i think when i was five years old, i didn't even know what the word 'rhyme' meant. i am impressed. you're very cute. well done, little dude.
Rock On!
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This is my favorite one yet!! Great job!! Its tooo cute!!! you have an awesome way with words!! hehe!! byes! always, Sam
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A great poem, I hope you weren't too scared about the witch though! You're a great young poet Well done for the rhymes too
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What a cute poem! Congratulations LittleBrother - I look forward to hearing more from you =)
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Amazing
Wow, very amazing piece! I love the write, good form and everything, keep up the good works; thanks for sharing! -
lol, if I saw a whitch I would be very scared,lol, Thanks for sharing this
.. you are making fab progress in your poems, I cant wait to read more of your poems
pinkwhite -
A perfect short children's piece. It's fantastic. LittleBrother, you amaze me, having this much a way with words at the age of five.
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Very good young man!
I don't think it's too short at all; a poem that ends in ZOOM should be short I can't wait to read this to my boys in the morning. Great job!
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great Job
This is something I'd like to hear the little monsters recite to me other than that "Trick or Treat" oldie..Simply a wonderfully penned childrens piece
Thanks for sharing
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Aww!! That's adorable..you have a talented child on your hands
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I'm glad you liked his poem, I'm his mom, I wanted to tell you that it's short because he was only five when he wrote this. Thanks for reading.
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perhaps the odor of a shoe recently vacated was enough to sweep her offf her feet and fleeing to the ozone where there is little to smell but the leftover unbreathable exhaust of man....hopefully she did not put a curse on you.....and I will definetly shoe away any witch i see in the same befooting manner...lol..Artis
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This is very cute, and I wish it was a little longer perhaps. But I could definitely see this in a children's book, with a nicely pencilled sketch to go along with it. Cute!
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Yay! Love it. Happy Birthday too!!!!
Love Mommy
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