Gazing out my frosted window,
Watching the early morning snow,
Across the field lay a blanket of white.
My soul for a moment fills with delight.
Soon the children will be playing
And I shall be ever praying
To my delightful Lord thanks and praises,
For the music in my soul He raises
Seeing snow angels, forts and balls
Oh how reminiscence calls
Of youthful days snowy white long gone bye.
A single joyful tear moistens my eye.
Author notes
This relects my love for children and for nature.
Written June 7th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Winter by AP Greeters.
400 points, ended July 2, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This was very sweet wonderful work this put a smile on my face lots of love and good luck in the contest Robin...aka SH
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Lovelky picture of kids having fun - your poem only compliments - or is it the other way around? lol either way I like it.
thanks for entering and good luck
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Great job! Rhyming,flow picture everything just makes it great! Good Luck in the contest!!
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This poem is as playfull as the picture that accompanies it. Great rhyming and flow.
Thanks for entering the contest and welcome to Allpoetry
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awww this is sweet and light and airy...i enjoyed reading..nice entry...good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry...hugs....leanne xxx
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You're right. Funny everytime I read it I did so without the 's' on reminiscence which is what I wanted to say. I didn't want the plural reminiscences. I'll correct it. Thanks again.
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Oh how reminiscences calls <--- it was only that line, actually. The noun is plural which calls for a single verb. That's just an oopsie. So, therefore, it's only a grammatical difference
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On second thought. I think I'll keep the verb tenses as is. Sometimes it's not correct prose but it fits the poem as I see it. The one rhyme I struggled with was praises and raises, but at the final analysis went with it. The poem is meant to convey present thoughts and feelings as they come while looking out the window. The imagination is future and past. The feelings are present.
I do very much appreciate the comment. You made me reexamine the whole poem which is good. At a future date I may change it but for the contest, I'll leave it.
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Thanks I wrote it rather quickly and posted it right away. I'll look for the errors and correct if that is permisable in a contest.
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Lovely portrait! I enjoyed it.
There are some verb tenses which are easily mis-oopsed. I'm sure you'll find it.
Other than some of the words appearing forced in the rhyme, I liked it a lot, along with the display background.
Thank you, so much for your entry! Warmly, CookieZeal -
Very nicely done melphleg. You described a winter scene full of fun and laughter that warms the spirit. Good luck!
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Thank you. I so rarely write a poem about nature since it is not my forte. I really appreciate the comment. You made my day.
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Nicely done. I'm always a little reticent when I see a poem with an AA/BB rhyme pattern- as they so rarely work. You make this work in points, and to great effect, and others are a little less powerful.
Nicely done though.
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