Snow flakes fresh, clean and white
Fell from heaven last night.
What a beautiful sight:
The white blanket of snow
Covering the ground below
The trees weighted down low.
The air is crisp and cold.
The ground sparkles like gold.
What a sight to behold!
But, still my heart is sad.
No, I'm not very glad,
For man is a rotten lad
Who will blacken this spot
And ruin this fair plot.
It makes my anger hot!
Author notes
I am critical of man destroying the beauty of nature. Fresh fallen snow is beautiful until man ruins it.
Written June 7th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Winter by AP Greeters.
400 points, ended July 2, 2004, 49 entries
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I like this poem of yours. It was always sheer joy for me when, as a kid living in England I was the first to leave my foot or hand print in new snow. Walking along the road however, a different story all together once pristine snow, now slush being splashed up by passing traffic - not pleasant.
Thanks for your entry and Good Luck
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Ooo, that reads so much smoother now. Silly me (I knew something was wrong with the way I read it though). -Thanks!
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The 14th line is not a question it is part of a sentence.
"No, I'm not very glad, for man is a rotten lad who will blacken this spot and ruin this fair plot." "Who" refers to the rotten lad. Thanks for the comment. I really appreciate it. -
PseudoMotional says
Very genuine to have a hatred for a force that would dare ruin such a timeless beauty. I like the idea of the rhyme scheme and, in my opinion, it worked best towards the beginning. I pity people who live in places that never get to experience the magic of snow (or what's left of the magic). This is a great poem and speaks brightly about a terrible thing. I think the fourteenth line needs a question mark instead of a period but overlooking that, this is indeed brilliant bit of poetry! --PseudoMotional has spoken-- -
GREAT POEM
I liked your poem. I hate all the old black snow along the highways. It seems to stay there till the spring. I'm a new member too, good luck in the contest. -
this was enjoyable I like the pic! Good luck in the contest!!!!!
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i like your poem..but i'm not sure i understand your view on man "ruining snow"...but anyway..good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry...hugs....leanne xxx
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I agree, there is nothing more beautiful in nature than freshly fallen, undisturbed snow! It's nice to behold for a moment... but I too just HAVE to go run in it or let the dog go get covered in snow
Wonderfully thought and and expressed
Good luck and thanks for entering
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Good illustration while following the rules to the contest. I DO love the title!
I had hoped that there would be much more
Thank you for sharing, CookieZeal
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When I walk by a field that is pristine with snow.....I make a snowball and toss it into it.(Can't help myself) But I hate when I have to shovel the stuff out of my driveway so I can get out, and then have the snow plow push it back in
Nice poem with a good flow and rhyming to it. Thanks for entering the contest and welcome to Allpoetry
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A very well done piece, and kudos to you for expressing an opinion whilst still staying true to the contest guidelines. I always hate seeing what little snow we get in my parts ruined by the tourists, so I can relate to this on some level.
The three line rhymes were well done.
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I must agree. I almost hate letting my daughter play in it, because footprints blacken the purity, but then I behold something even more priceless, her tiny footprints in the snow, and that is far prettier than what it was before.
Thanks for entering our contest, melphleg, welcome to AP and good luck!
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