I'm talking to myself again
What's this I feel?
A slight emptiness without fear
Of suffocation or regret
It's how my mind works
Whilst being alone and
Surrounded by thoughts of song
I dance to my own melody
Soothed by the lullaby
But what's this?
The music stopped
Reality
Harsh, bitter hatred creeps in
I don't like it
I need harmony
This escapism of melodic sound
I need to fall upon
But instead, I fall apart
No music, no rhythm, no life
Author notes
Written on 7th June 2004 at 17:12 GMT
About what would happen if music was removed from my life.
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A contest entry
- Diddlysquat (10 options) by PandaBaby.
400 points, ended November 29, 2004, 18 entries
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What did you think
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Music is the essence of life. Without it ~ I personally ~ would be lost deep in the abyss of nothingness. Your poetry is beautiful to say the least. This one is no different.
Excellent ...
Jeffro -
OH I LOVE THIS!!! Especially the last line.
"No music, no rhythm, no life"
So true. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck. -
I like that when the music is taken away everything changes for the worse. Powerful message..
"Reality
Harsh, bitter hatred creeps in
I don't like it" - I like these few lines. Music can keep out reality and all the bad emotions that are hiding somewhere within you. But when it's taken away...
"I need to fall upon
But instead, I fall apart" - I also liked these two lines. *Sigh* music is so important!
I do prefer rhyme and stanza, but I liked this poem anyway. If I were you I would add punctuation though.
Nice write and God bless. -
this is great....really...thank you for entering
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kinda reminds me of how i hate to just TURHN the music off.. just cut it off mid rockin'. i have to either wait or turn it down first. music does have a way of just surrounding you.
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