pointing
at an ancient oak
with the gnarled limb
which once lifted me
high into its branches
Andrew Hide
06~06~2004
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Written June 6th, 2004
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Beautiful and vivid imagery of a young boy child playing in the branches of an oak tree! It is sweet to think of how you remember the oak which you played in as a child...and over the years, you've grown and matured, while the oak has aged. This is a very nice ode to the oak. Truly, this made for a very nice read. I am so inspired by you{and people are inspired by me: my name means "the one who inspires", you inspire the one who inspires
Thanks for sharing!
-Charishma -
your writing is a true insperation to poets here on ap. You have seem to master this style. your flow flawless. I love how you take a simpl oak tree and metaphore it as a caring mother. well done
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I have been reading a lot of poems around the theme of oak these past few days and I love them. This is nice.
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Delightful
Hi Andrew:
I like the look, feel and the words of this Tanka. Excellent story, with a picture in my mind of a young boy playing in this tree. Dreaming of years gone by. Thanks for this delightful Tanka. Bill -
..melody supreme..
..what sweet melody!! indeed; very calming..
..spiros -
Can't wait for the class to start. I've read some articles about tanka, but wouldn't dare to try and write one, it wouldn't be near so good as yours.
Splendid imagery in this one!
Mari
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