at day-break
the dog watches each bee
fly over the fence
with each
a wag of his tail
and a dream in his eye
Andrew Hide
03~06~2004
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Written June 3rd, 2004
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awesome imagery. I could really put myself in the dog's paws and imagine his emotions.
Jennifer -
Really nice one. AGain, contemplation and, perhaps, a representation of stupefaction.
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In perfect harmony with earth
Andrew you have such wonderful purity ..Everything I have read of yours open the windows of my soul ..Wonderful resolution ~smiles~ ,,thanks for sharing the tranquility my friend ..~Skinwalker -
Very thought-provoking poem...painting a serene and dreamy scene. Very creative work! I liked this very much - just enough said to put a dream in the reader's eye. Well-done Andrew!
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Oh, so nice. Great poetic format. Watch out little doggie, bees can sting you!
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nice work , not really my type but oh well
its good all the same... hmm add some blood and gutz... or wait i keep forgetting its your work not mine just joking , i liked it and i hope you continue to put your thoughts into words
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This is so beautiful... I never come across this format "sedoka"... could you please educate me on this format... I'm all for learning...
mina -
if dogs could fly we'd all be watching them frolic in the clouds and dodging thier droppings, I have never been shat on by a bee, but they do you know, we just don't see it, cute poem, the gleam in the eye of the dog at the thought of flighty pursuit, truly a neat write and thought provoking...good work...Artis
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..yess, a very calming poem--i'm pleased to have read it..
spiros -
this is brilliant.
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I don't really understand haiku, but this made sense to me.
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Gentle
Hi Andrew:
A very nice and gentle write. I really like the thoughts and the gentleness of this write. You have done yourself proud with this write. Thank you for sharing it with us. Bill
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