Sweet is sorrow in the shade of seashells;
so far away from home,
Resting peaceful in lights decay,
though not sleeping all alone,
Jaded eyes of sea green dreams
and Purple sun that drapes down from close above,
Smothered blankets of long sweet dreams
to place, in perfect love,
Here I lay my shells to sleep
kiss them with my whispered care,
Breathe in deep as sweet dreams sleep
stabs the sorrowed air,
Hush my seashell beached on wood
and gently close your eyes,
Blue will shed its crystal gleam
and tuck thee in the sky,
Clouds will come and stars will pierce
and nighttime will come close,
Breathe in deep in sweet retreat
to lay in juxtapose,
Side by side in watered gleams;
of saline salt
that’s Ocean Two so pure,
Sweet soft petals in fluttered dreams;
that will always quietly; assure.
Author notes
twas looking at this purple flower in the twilight and tis were some babbling random thoughts that came about while I was peeking at it through the columbine and just daydreaming about how pretty someone precious and dear may think it twas
Written June 1st, 2004
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Very Nice
your poem has a sadness in the words, but at the same time it releases this almost calm and relaxing atmosphere to it. Very Good poem I must say... -
wow. This is real, true poetry. Sometimes I feel as if I am a reader, or an over looker for say when reading peoples poetry. In yours, I feel as if I am the writer. The word: "juxtapose" is a word that I persoanlly love. I know it sounds weird, but I have also used it to describe many things and found that interesting. Very extravagent.
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excellent
A very awesome poem...you really have a way with words..
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this is a very touching piece.. you express yourself through nature very well. thank you for sharing... and just a random note, the picture is a nice visual, but really doesn't do anything to add to or complement your piece.. the words speak for themselves, and I might add, they are humming a subtle rondeau of nature's glory. much love to you and blessings in all your endeavors.
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Exquisite! I love purple for one thing! And the images that this poem conjures up for me are glorious! I think I shall bookmark this. BTW, your photography on your webpage is superb! Have you ever photographed a passionflower?
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wow this was an awesome poem...2 thumbs up.
im def. adding you to my favorites. keep it up
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Kim
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This is what I think poetry is is all about. Wonderfully romantic and flowery. Words that can paint a picture in the mind of the reader. This is just the type of thing one reads and then takes a deep sigh afterwards just admiring the beauty of it.
Anna -
reading your poem is like feeling the wind kisses you goodnight. it shows the beauty of nature- you painted nature so beautifully!
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-Sniffles- Your very good. What part of Washington?
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You always woo everyone with your beautiful poetry, Joe. In this one I get the sense that the purple daddy flower is tucking in his seashell children for the night. It emotes such sweet tenderness, as usual...I always love reading your stuff it makes me feel like stretching out my tension and just leaning back on a puffy cloud and resting with sweet dreams.
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I really like that. <3 Beautiful.
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Enjoyed the read and the pic' very much. Beautiful!
Steve -
This has a very dreamlike quality to it. Very enchanting and serene. You have created a very sweet aura with your words. Simply breathless!
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just a fancy word for side by side
LOL, it rhymed and I looked it up and was great it works LOL
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Do I even need to say anything about this piece?? Joe, probably the best piece of your's that I've read!! (apart from I dont know what "juxtapose" means) But bloody hell this was AMAZING Joe!! Really well done!!!!!!
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wow...just gorgeous. It's so wonderful when you find inspiration like that.
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WOW! That is all i can say. You write so well and i enjoy reading what you have written.
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excellent articulation, and not far at all off the point, just opne of those rolling swooping rhyming thoughts that rolls off the mind at times when you are missing your fellow child LOL, (aye I do try to be a child at heart) and you qued into that it appears, the tense was great as well, kinda like past leading to present, I like to build pathways in some of my poems, as simple as that may sound, and you very much pointed out what it was I was doing and I never really realized it until you broke it down in the tense part of your comment, wonderful commentary my friend, one doesn't oft receive such well crafted commentary that makes one see a new light in their own words, thank you much, and I do believe, as darn stingy as I am with points, you deserve some for this one, its obvious you spent a lot of thought and time in crafting your words,
sincerely,
joe -
I see this as caring and gentle, but I also sense a great sandness to this as well right from the start of "sweet is sorrow", and you say only in the shade of seashells away from home. They are empty, and this is what brings to me the sadness of departing children. You show your care for them, 'here i lay my shells to sleep'. As thoughts, memories to keep. Then past that "hush my seashell beached on wood", you began talking of a loved one. Which makes me believe you were talking in future tense at the beginning of the poem and present tense later on in. Though, I do see sorrow "breath in deep as sweet dreams sleep stabs the sorrowed air", makes me think you guys got past something big.
Though, I really have no idea what your relationship status is..
I did enjoy every bit of imagery and wordplay in this, though if a bit confused by the meaning.
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Terrific
This title is beautiful and pulls one into the poem. I find a prayer-like reverence in this poem, especially from the line "Here I lay my shells to sleep." This continues through the rest of the poem nicely. Your primarily iabic quatrameter lines are well balanced by your varying line that keeps away any monotony. Your rhymes and placement of rhymes are not immediately predictable, and so they give us a surprising sense of pleasure. This is a well-thought-out poem. Bravo! -
You write with the same passion as your little billet-doux on my Author's page ...
These words reflected the sensitive heart of our Joe. With your eyes you capture beauty; with your poems you extend those images ...
Thank you, dearest Poet.
Myra -
Wonderfully Written!
This was such a beautifully written piece my dear bro, and I see even though away a bit from writing, you have not missed a beat, great job! I hope all is well with you, I miss seeing ya around my little corner of AP, lol...Though it's best you stay with more cherful poets...For my pieces are far from uplifting as of late, but I hope that changes soon...Just know I appreciate your words that flow so beautifully that you share here, and might I add, your comments rock too!
Thanks for being you, and pen on!
Beautiful pic too, laters bro!
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YOU are truly gifted and the picture speak what words at times cannot~
Such a beautiful image that touches the heart and takes the mind to dreamland~
Just where I need to go~
Bravo to you my friend~
YOU love to take images and bring them to life~
Then life you have given to those who search for it~
Just looking at the pictures you have taken opens many doors~
Keep on doing what you are doing my dear
and much love~Desire
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would i be fortunate enough to be the lass tucked in your arms... this is beautiful and melancholy... for i here the call of the sea, her waves lapping up gently and beconing. but the sea hue greenns, mingles wi' the sky hue ppurple, or on that night... thos brillirnt early morns... that blue, that breathes.
'Blue will shed its crystal gleam
and tuck thee in the sky,'
by far some of the most beautiful lines that i 'ave heard from ye joe... mayhap from anyone at all really. and makes me think of careful dreams that i 'ave had whilst tuckes under the sky... and may we dream on...
arden
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What a beautiful write Joe and I am sure anyone who has come here and seen the picture and read the poem will find it lovely indeed.
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This was an extrememly beautiful write, so full of imagery, and feelings. Bringing everything to life. I can say that you've picked quite an awesome picture, that would inspire me to write too. Just looking at it, I can see where you were inspired. Beautifully written, Joe.
~Aimee
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Your words paint soft images of how beautiful life can be - the original blessing bestowed on us. Makes me wonder where it all went wrong. But visions like this, because of the absolute knowing it is true, caress our minds and give us an infinite measure of positive energy. We were born with this ability, this God given talent in a world that contains more than we could ever wish for. I cherish these moods that effortlessly pale the prefab amusement of today. Perhaps for me it is not hard to do; I was born in such a place. Until they bombed us out of there. Thank you for creating and sharing. I enjoyed reading and drew power from this. Take care,
Rage -
(For you...me sweet Joe)
Moon~beams dress you tender soul,
with gleaming eyes of love,
while stars on high with sighing breath
light you from above.
Sea~shell's dream of ocean's past
when on the sea~salt floor,
they glided through their sandy home
through the watery mass.
Now laid to rest beneath a flower,
no one know's just how...
yet there they take on a whole new life
with star~shine's brightest power.
The purple hue the flowers cast
to color collective shells,
is reminiscent of days gone by
before their ocean fell.
While dolphins played
in waves of green,
and waters echoed still,
dreaming sea~shell's lay beneath
bid the fisherman's will. ~Laura
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Oh Sweetie, what a beautiful resting place for these pearly oyster shells Even tho they are a long way from home.. "i know"
But how special they are together under such pretty draping
Blosoms looking down watching over them like a Mother hen
swaying, saying a lil' prayer like they are a child they just tucked in.. just before falling off to sleep into sweetdream land
Your words are like a prayer with a touch of a lullaby's breath
whispering in the shadows light.. hush' everything will be alright
You always find such beauty Sweet Pea to photograph
Me hasn't even gone exploring yet with my Camera
to find such a beautiful simple lil' thing as these shells
They are the most precious ..aren't they hon ?
These lines remind me of somethings should be
be left to enjoy as they are..
Here I lay my shells to sleep
kiss them with my whispered care,
Breathe in deep as sweet dreams sleep
stabs the sorrowed air,
Clouds will come and stars will pierce
and nighttime will come close,
Breathe in deep in sweet retreat
to lay in juxtapose,
This certainly wasn't any babbling my dearest sweet Jo Jo
These words were meant to bring this captured photo to life
And that it most surely did my Sweetest One
Of course i think of everything as having a soul
right down to the tiniest pebble LOL
Love this Sweetie.. it's just a reflection of how
Precious you look at the many things most people take for granted.. And that's why me loves you sooooo Hon
That Precious Heart that makes you.. YOU
Such Wonderful poetry Joe.. This made me feel like we are always protected and never alone..
~ Love You Sweety, this was so Beautiful ~
xox Mina xox
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elequently I see through this write how fragile life is
till we refresh it all in words of charm
as you so did...
each element of life is beautiful
thanks for sharing your kind heart
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this is such a beautiful poem im actully relly glad i decided to read this poem because i try to write poems like this but they always turn out dark and how the world is crap ect ect and boring la la la...lol sorry... good write though my favourite lines probably have to be:
Blue will shed its crystal gleam
and tuck thee in the sky,
Clouds will come and stars will pierce
and nighttime will come close,
Breathe in deep in sweet retreat
to lay in juxtapose,
Side by side in watered dreams;
of saline salt that’s Ocean Two;
so pure,
but the over all wirte is fantastic and lovely welldone hun
Faith xxxxxxxxxx
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