Should I challenge
you to speak it
spell it now ~
Or forever hold
your piece of
a broken
dream
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Written May 31st, 2004
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hmm a Maatkara Challenge....eheh I hope that the person actually did live it up and didn't break the dream...
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Another well written poem. Keep up the work
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Yes, but considering the sad events of his life (more than most could endure) it's amazing what a wit he was.
However, as he said himself, "A tendency to melancholy...let it be observed, is a misfortune, not a fault."
~ G
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I don't wish to be arguementative, however, what I know of Abraham Lincoln, he was a very sad man.
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I'd make sure I never felt that way.
"A man is about as happy as he makes up his mind to be."
~ Abraham Lincoln
~ G
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So often lost in the crowds of the big city a smile passes between potential lovers and then they disappear with the closing of a subway train door. After a while one forgets how to smile and that love exists.
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Today is a day unlike any other day
This is the paradox within Pandora’s box
And I do feel this is very real for me
And it clearly defines my history
Yes, I’ve been on a mystical quest
With a monk who is reclusive to say the least
And you have finally made me see and believe
Speak now so thy seal shall be unbroken
In our vows and dreams left unspoken
From one life we journey into the arms of another
Yet, we never lose track of our dearest memories
Your fires burn so deeply within me
Darling you’re all I can ever see
And when life’s a four-leaf clover
And therein lies all the truth we know whisper
As the angles ask me what was the most heartfelt quest of my journey
I shall simply say why my Beloved its always been you eternally
I shall always remember you and you shall be my eternal heart memories
I shall deeply treasure your heart and souls memories always.
If only if only you can believe in the love of us as we
Our rare and scared trust that surely arrives from heaven above
I now today see clearly in love and the rush to be one in our soul
Joined forever eternally in one heavenly role foretold.
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stunned again. This is one i'd love to send to a few people. and you put into words, what i could never say before.
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Thank you Kamilah (what a gorgeous name!), I really appreciate your comment and applause
~G
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I'm In Awe
This made me think...don't ask me to explain what I thought because I'm not sure I even can explain it anyway
Really deep thought-provoking write. Excellent Job! Can't wait to read more!
Kamilah
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I can't say how much those few lines speak so loud to me.
I say all what I feel, and I guess I expect the same from everyone which causes me disappointments if one keeps silence.
Very good poem, as always!
Mari
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Thank you for your wonderful comment, Nicolette! The paradox and paradigm; yes, the duality and double entente of all human interactions...you read it right.
~ G
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Thought-provoking with depth!
Your "challenge" made me think, my friend... and I just loved the ripples it caused in my mind and deep down inside! I love the intelligence that flows from your pen and the clever use and almost double meaning of words - "speak now or forever hold your peace (piece)..." Maybe they should make this poem of yours the new wedding vow, lol - because we all enter into relationships with pieces of broken dreams! "Spell it now" - a potent credo indeed. I just love your work! -
Oh my! I love it when you write me one of your inimitably poetic commentaries...don't you dare "shut up", it's wonderful!
Great quote too, thank you Tom
~G
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In perfect harmony ~ I dance beneath you
Wonderful ,,so few words ,,they melt into the river of knowledge and sing to the worthy heart downriver ..The
winged heart takes flight as the soul flies backwards into yesterday ..Oh now ,I must shut up ~smiles ...
"The face is the mirror of the mind, and eyes without speaking confess the secrets of the heart."
Saint Jerome (374 AD - 419 AD)
Lovely words my friend ~So awesome ~skinwalker -
Ha ha! Very good, Andu
Grazi hufna!
~ G
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True words of wisdom. I cannot say much, but this poem says a lot.
I will applaud you and forever hold my peace
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Yes Wildman. Much is revealed by what is left out...like another stanza from the poem you quote:
"I leaned my back against an oak
Thinking it was a trusty tree
But first it bent and then it broke
Just as my love proved false to me."
~ G
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Hehe, Bongmaster Funny 'toke' on it...have another, it might all become clear...
~ G
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One of those eternal questions.. that may be best unchallenged - and thus flows the river by, into the gaping blue..
"there is a ship and she sailed the sea... she's loaded deep, as deep can be.." The Water is Wide - anon -
Heavy Duty Beauty
Hey G,
Yeah I agree, the dreams are now. Speak your voice or crawl in a hole. The winners will speak the strongest, I'm hoping I do. This is greatr advice to the possibly beaten. It's never too late to change things in your reality if you dare keep dreaming, applying, believing and sharing the faith of what you are trying to do. Doubt is something I like doing without. Very profound poetry here. I love the big poems with the small words.
A true poet inevery sense of the word. Keep climbing. Tommy
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This is what I call a very interesting poem, there was lots of letters and words. kinda made me think very wise
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Once again... you've created words of wisdom - powerful!.. I humbly applaud - and clap
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I know you meant it positively, of course, M Glad you picked up the ambiguity...that is the point.
~ G
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Oh, thank you Dee! I didn't know about the contest...I'll check it out, thanks for the tip
~ G
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Decisions, decisions!
Should I challenge
you to speak it, (Can you risk what might be said?)
spell it now ~ (Get it over with. Quicker pain, sooner over)
Or forever hold
your piece of
a broken
dream
This little poem, loaded with feeling as it is, would fit right into Brida's contest (click contests) for short poems. Another would be that beautiful candle poem. --Dee
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Patience is a virtue,
possess it if you can,
seldom found in Woman,
never found in Man.. . . . author unknown.
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I mean iconoclasm in the best way, breaking idols.
I think I may be missing your point! Who is holding onto whose broken dream?
I really like your quote, I have been too patient. -
Iconoclast! Who me?
Actually, not so here...
As a line from a Stuart Davis song says,
"Patience is a virtue, true
but patience has its boundaries too"
~ G
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Direct
You are ever the one for iconclasm!
The kinder move would be to question rather than challenge, sometime rather than now or never.
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