There are moments,
(many for the Few)
that I remember You
and Your Promise
When Hope remained
then died,
a little,
as we cried
Felt that sinking feeling
Rise again
As when dreaming
some really were Awake
only to discern
that was our mistake
They are still
sleepwalking
Hazardous to shake
too suddenly,to break
their illusionsof Fidelity.
Alone it is thenwith You
this Way
Until at Lastthey'll See
the Day
Author notes
Photo: Lilium Candidum
(aka Madonna Lily; Easter Lily)
Ephesians 5:14 [RSV]
Written May 31st, 2004
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beautiful picture...very moving poem.
interesting use of capitalization throughout the innerstructure of the poem...added a bit of a unique style there.
your faith shines through this poem...very expressive. -
The lily is beautiful and the poem is stunning. It flowed with grace and poise. You can have many different awakenings.
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illusions...
illusions...so many illusions in our lives..some prefer their illusions to realities...so true a very meaningful short piece here
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Deep and simple....
I am so impressed about anything I find on your site, space , wathever you call it.I like the images, the colors, the very wise sentences you have selected to communicate yopur veiwing of life.And I was not surprised to find your poems have the same spirituality and deep meaning.I would love to keep on reding you as soon as I can.I am quite a new member and submited a couple of poems at ALL POETRY and some at Sharepoetry.I hope everyday are more and more people like you around.... -
You have such a profound style...I am still searching for mine(smile)I love the way you worded this piece.It was a joy to
read.I hope that you will read my two.Hopefully I will learn
from being here.I truly do love poetry.But loving it and being
good,are two different things.A most awesome write! -
sighs.
no doubt your heart has been damaged too.
God bless you for enduring, and being able to sustain your gifts. Even a 'god' is vulnerable.
sammy -
thumbs up
the last line is really powerful. i like alot how your rhyme does not sound forced at all. good job -
Thank you, Yem!
Ah, never give up hope... it's really never too late. 
~G
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Not the least bit interested in the mechanics of poetry. If it sounds good and is interesting that is all I care about. Then again, I write (bad) fiction, lol.
I was a sleepwalker for many years--I've tried to change these past couple years but the road is hard when paved by mistakes. In fact this poem could have been written by those who knew me, and once had hope and had given up.
Anyway, water under the bridge.
Fidelity is hard for many people. I guess it starts with loving yourself and then desiring (and finding) that kindred spirit. I wouldn't know, I've failed miserably, lol.
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Thank you for your wonderfully thoughtful comment, Katie!
Yes, "He who promised is faithful", indeed!
~ Gennelle
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The background to this poem has such a warm, calm feeling, that drew my attention first of all as the page opened ... then, I read the words you have penned here. Through life, there are many who may make promises to us, some intend to keep those promises at the time of making them, however, often when it comes time to act upon the promises, people are hindered by some other committment or such and are unable to keep the promise. I do believe, that people tend to make promises without really realising that they are in effect almost making a vow. When the promise cannot be kept, there are two souls hurting instead of just the one who needed the help and now cannot receive it.
Please forgive my ramblings, I do know for sure there is one who would never, ever break his promise to any one of us, that is our Heavenly Father.
Food for thought in your poem for sure.
Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
~Katie~
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wow, this was an excelent poem, a good one in fact, keep up the writing -juarez
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What's interesting is that we can do it too.
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well, 'mechanics' can be learned, to refine the art, but the feeling and talent for it has to be inherent. You are so impatient to know everything instantly... give yourself time, you've already got the heart and the feel. That counts first!
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Yeah, but if you just write out your feelings without understanding the precise mechanics of what goes into good poetry, then someone who does will use your poem as an outline to write a genius poem- so you don't win, unless you have a grasp of both. Unfortunately, the mechanics allude me, and I play the fool on here
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Haha! Don't sell yourself short, Duana! One doesn't have to know all the esoteric terms and forms in the 'mechanics' to be able to write good poetry. It is an 'art', art has to come from the heart to be art. Otherwise it is only contrived and mechanical.
Thank you for appreciating my attempts.
~ G
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okay, confirmed, poetry is over my head, and I am making a fool of myself on here. I better leave the writing to poetry to those who know what they are doing. I will just enjoy reading the fruits of their labors Nice message in the poem by the way- I don't know how I missed this one but I love it.
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"And here's to the few
who forgive what you do
And the fewer who don't even care"
~ Leonard Cohen
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There are people in the world who do not like it. Such people are not pleased by anything, and since they know all, cannot be taught. "They are still / Sleepwalking / Hazardous to shake". Wonderful observation and concise wording, Gennelle.
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I Remember YOU
I shall remember you
My deepest love
When our lives are over
And life’s a four-leaf clover
And all the truth we know
I shall simply say
I remember you
Deepest love
I remember you
I remember you
I remember you
Who is the love that sings
Beyond our heavenly wings
Unto the very heart of us
Within a lovers blaze of one touch
Deepest love we shall always remain
The springtime within the autumn rains
One in our heartbeat that beat the same
I shall say
I remember you
Deepest love
I remember you
I will simply say
I remember you
Deepest love
I remember you
I remember you
I remember you
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Our feet are guided where they must fall. You have no idea how much I needed to read this. I have been enlightened.
Such truth never changes. Bookmarking this one. -
excellent and warming to the heart
Wow !!!Lovely awakenings Maatkara ..
"They are still
Sleepwalking
Hazardous to shake
too suddenly, to break
their illusions of
Fidelity."
Good Morning ...
"All truths are easy to understand once they are discovered; the point is to discover them."
Galileo Galilei (1564 - 1642)...
You did this very well in my eyes ,,what great a pic ~smiles..
You are a friend with much insight and kindness ..
Thank for sharing with us ~Skinwalker -
Good
We all need to have beautiful awakenings in our life, G, this work does help -
Thank you, M Yes, there's also a saying, 'Those convinced against their will, will hold the same opinion still.'
Love,
~ G
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Evocative
First I waited with the white lily.
Yes, that sinking feeling does rise, how curious! You have packed a lot of emotion and observation into a short poem, as is your wont.
I conclude that I cannot teach the unteachable, or raise the dead, and I must leave them to a higher power. This way we all are free.
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