We had Young Love, our passion flew and flowed
as doves and rivers on poetic tongue.
As seasons' change and sands of time out-mode,
too soon the toll of middle age is rung.
The smile that once sprung wild and free is gone,
his gait is slowed, to saunter out of breath,
his waist is more apparent than his brawn,
his eyes have wrinkles, now how soon is death?
His teeth have been replaced with porcelain,
eyeglasses aid the failing pow'r of sight,
the doctor is his closest dearest friend,
and sleep is his desire for blissful night.
In all of this I still remember when
my husband was the handsomest of men.
Author notes
Twenty three years of marriage!
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Written May 30th, 2004
A contest entry
- My mistress eyes are nothing like the sun by oakwolf.
300 points, ended June 6, 2004, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is so beautiful. After twenty-three years of marriage, you not only see him as he is, but you also see him as he was--a true prince among men.
You do realize, I'm sure, that I'll just be reading all of your sonnets so that I can see how much I'll learn.
Hugs, Patricia
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early sonnet
Thanks Patricia, but much as I like this sonnet for its content, it is not so wonderful.
Now it is 26 years, and still going strong.
There is something to be said for double vision, hm?
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Thanks Mr. S! This was written for an odd contest, to explain just how unattractive one's loved one is. Love rules!
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A very good sonnet! It does have a slightly sad note to it, as if perhaps there should be more… but to be honest and at the risk of being plagiaristic – I think this is as good as it gets!
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LOL!!! Oh please, tell me that this isn't the typical end of the days to every men!
That is why love, affection and friendship is so very important in a relationship. When the physical flair falls, love still will be there.
But here between us, thanks heavens for the fake teeth
Loves,
Mari
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This is a beautiful sonnet...I have thoroughly enjoyed reading your work today...Just beautiful.
Sam
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Thank you Karen. The acceptance goes both ways, we both feel blessed.
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Margaret, you do sonnets so well. We'd never get through life without the beauty we find through love, would we? This poem has a lesson of acceptance in it, which sooner or later catches everyone in some respect.
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Love is not blind, but it's very forgiving.
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This is beyond seeing his imperfections, this is...one foot out the door after the first young milkman that strolls by!
Not only do you anticipate death but harp on every imperfection the more man has. Whoever said love is blind never met MargaretG. I'm sorry that I asked you to write a poem about his flaws because now I am firmly in his corner...the poor fella, I wonder if he knows about the milkman?
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Thank you Jamie!
At that point we had no idea how MANY doctors would become our dear friends. Thank God that once again my sweetie is ship-shape.
I had just discovered that I was good at sonnets. I've now made a collection of 35 that I think are good, and that's about half of them. Thanks for the reading and applause.
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This is quite a lovely poem. The imagery is beautiful and the flow is superb. It appears to me to be in perfect iambic pentameter as well. Very well written and a very touching tribute to your husband. Best wishes... ~genielassie~
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What a lovely poem!! Thanks so much for sending me the link. You are such a wonderful poet, I love reading what you have to write. Thanks for all your words, and I adore having you as a friend
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thanks for the well done, and congratulations to you too
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Thank you so much for awarding my poem with the gold trophy. It was a very pleasant challenge, and you inspired some really funny poems, as well as some thoughtful ones. Well done, and congratulations to the other winners!
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What a great write. And in sonnet form too! Very honest yet loving.
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I really like it! very nicely done and pulled off with such style. Best of luck in the contest! BON
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OH! LOL You!
this is too funny...and i can so relate! lol
Bless their hearts! lol
GREAT write! (you didn't let him read this did ya? he'd be scarred ya know..hehe)
much love & peace & best wishes in the contest
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Excellent
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Wonderful!
Hi,
Very nice indeed! The meter as always is right on target. I love Sonnets! You have such a flair for this form indeed. You have penned a classic here
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lol, guess that happens. Neat that you can bring out the good and the bad. (Although the bad isn't really bad since it's natural)
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beautyfull work
I loved it, I have never been much with sonnets myself (stuck in my own style) but if I ever get to writting them I just hope that I can do as well as you did with this one. You were unflattering but at the same time you made the ulflattering loveable nudge I would take this on to poetry.com and have it made into a plaque for and aniversy gift.. if he likes you writting he would love that.. (I would). once again, beautifull. -
You are so very good at this form and the funny ones you come up with are just brilliant.This is so sweet as well and I wish you both the very best for many more years of marital bliss.Very best wishes.
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The terms of the contest specify an unflattering poem about someone I love, so here it is! There is so much more that is wonderful about him!
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Lovely
This is beautiful. And it really is a sonnet in all senses of the word too! I've seen so many poems that say they are a sonnet, but have too many or two few lines. Besides the fact that this is a sonnet, it's absolutely gorgeous. That man must be pretty special to have someone think of him as incredibly loveable. :-D Never give in, Annandhel. -
Thanks for your applause and comment! I exaggerated a LITTLE bit! He is my sweetie, and I am his; the rest of life comes as it will!
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Excellent
Nothing to start the day like a successful love story and marriage of 23 years. Bravo and CONGRATULATIONS!!! Here's looking at, at least, 23 more happy years! 
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Just great!
I am still chuckling as I write. Wonderful sonnet, terrific wit, and tender feelings wrapped in appreciation send this poem high among the memorables! Does he know you wrote this? I'll bet a big hug if he does! --Dee -
great write! i love all of the lines in this poem! this is brilliant . i just keep reading great poems on this website . this is another poem that is greatly written!
charismangel98 -
Piercingly honest
You beat me by a year! He he! Brilliantly done, and so poignantly penned. Geez, M, what have you been feeding him! 
(just kiddin' 
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~ G
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awesome poem, very nice to show your husband how much you care. it really means alot to people when someone cares so deeply they write poetry about them! i know i'd love to see my boy friend write something fancy for me, LMAO yeah right, thats the last thing he'd ever do! lol *sigh* oh well...
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A wonderfully worded piece about lasting love and how some memories know no bounds of time....they echo with us endlessly
keep up the good work
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Oh, what a wonderful tribute to your husband. I have been married for 20+ years. Mine is still so very handsome. I still write tender love poems to him. Great write. Cheryl
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Excellent Write
ahhhhhhh Books and covers
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Witty, Wise, and Lovely
What a delightful tribute to your love. I hope you share with him the last couplet. For wit I like the fourth stanza -- your husband is fortunate to have one one doctor as his closest friend -- I am of such advanced age that "doctors" are my closest "friends" -- indeed one more ailment and they could convene a congress. Beautifully written.
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