DARK feelings overpower me
As I rise to meet the day
Robbed of my security
Kills my will to carry on
DARK clouds following me
Above this gloomy existence
Reality is but a dream
Kept far out of my reach
DARK depression has its grip
Around my inner being
Rising doubts about this life
Keep me from living
DARK clothes that shadow me
And keeps the world at bay
Resisting help from everyone
Kindness repayed with a glare
DARK life that can no longer be endured
Acceptance is intolerable
Recognizing the end is here
Kissed by death, I comply
Author notes
Gold in the theDARK1's contest
allpoetry.com/Contest/652068
Written May 30th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- a DARK shortie by theDARK1.
320 points, ended May 31, 2004, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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"DARK life that can no longer be endured
Acceptance is intolerable
Recognizing the end is here
Kissed by death, I comply"
The end was my favorite
I Like how you did this Great write
And congrats on winning gold -
i was just curious why you took your poem out of the contest. it still shows up for now, but i noticed that i can't get back to my contest through your poem. guess that's why i am curious what happened.
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A very cool dark acrostic
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Congrats on the gold - you deserved it!!!
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This is very beautiful and very unique. I love how you chose to write this and it is well worth the GOLD. I know theDARK1 loved it. I did too! CONGRATULATIONS!!! Well earned work of art!
Much Love,
Renee
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Excellent
Very impressive. I wish I could think of things like that. You definitely earned the gold. Congratulations! -
That was such a dark poem, literally lol... Great format and structure, I thought you did a beautiful job on it! Or shall I say a dark job lol... But yeah, i thought it was awesome, 2 thumbs up! Keep up the great poetry from your poetic self! Thanks for sharing!
-Little Tim
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it grabbed my attention immediately...as i do enjoy cleverness. my other screen name on this site does many acrostics. very compelling write as itz structure, DARK.
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Jon... *drool*
good job whisper, i liked it, very very good, 
, this was very good, lol, best of luck to you in the contest
-Forever Mad Clown Love-
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this is good, i was going to enter this contest but i had only like seven minutes to try and come up with something so i gave up..haha, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest...
take care
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brilliant! I love the very clever and creative way you got the word "dark" in 10 times. I would never have thought of that!
I also like how you covered darkness in its various aspects, and how you "began" the day with darkness in the first stanza and how you "ended" everything at the close of the poem. you have a way of layering your cleverness. no wonder you win contests!
and I wish you luck in this one too.
~travis
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rocks
Interesting....
I like it
I liked how you repeat dark both inthe acrostic and as the first word in each stanza. I can feel the sinking despair and the cloudy gloominess....or maybe just me? Good luck
peace and love
Susan
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Clever layout! i like it!
-good luck
-rik
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