Crisp winter days make me remember
and bring a smile to my face
of that glorious day one December
when you brought joy to this place
The lights were glistening in snow covered trees
snowflakes adorned your mop of hair
I was so afraid that my body would freeze
yet you insisted that I stop to stare
A moment was captured, forever in my heart
of you dancing in the clean newness of it all
I thought that the joy would tear my soul apart
for I realized that we had survived the fall
When life seems too hard to take
your face always comes to mind
laughing while snow angels we tried to make
happiness so bright it could make us blind
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Written May 29th, 2004
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Nicely down...we have all made snow angels. The lines flowed well together, crisp clear can almost feel that your outside and being a part of this poem. Love it ~Sie
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this is very sweet and the imagry you used in this made me feel like I was there. You did an exclent job at getting your feelings out through the words you wrote.
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The lights were glistening in snow covered trees
snowflakes adorned your mop of hair
A moment was captured, forever in my heart
of you dancing in the clean newness of it all~
These are my favorite lines. i like the image of snowflakes glistening in someone's hair in the wintertime. Also, I like how your described how snow made you feel. This poem is sad. It brings a deep sadness to me. It reminds me of losing someone. And how smells, seasons and tastes remind you of them. How people become angelic in death and maybe that is because we can see how fragile life really is and how even imperfections are beautiful. I love this and you baby!Keep writing, you are amazing!~Daina
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This is so beautiful.I saw the title and i was like winter yay.Lol.Sorry i love everything about winter it's so pretty i love when it comes it makes eveything seem so bright like the sky switches with the ground because it hurts your eyes to look at the ground just like it usually is to look at the sky.Anyway i loved this.Please keep writing.
Hugs.
Mandi -
When life seems too hard to take
your face always comes to mind
laughing while snow angels we tried to make
happiness so bright it could make us blind~The smile of ones face from the past can be haunting or beautiful for one to remember. I really like your style...very refreshing.
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The only way I'll ever see snow again is if I live in Michigan again...and there's no way in the hell I'm going to do that after what I've been through. But this poem reminds me that it did snow toward the end of April, which might come as a shock to some people but it's pretty commonplace up there.
This poem is lovely, and speaks of so much joy. I don't know if either of us have ever really experienced those emotions (well I know for certain I haven't, but I wouldn't be so sure about you) but I pray that it does happen...one day.
~many blessings from your little sister~
Raven Aurora (Tiget Lily)
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This is great. . . I hate rhyme. . . but, other than that, it's great. I was just so calmed by this poem. . . humbled. I had a long schpeil thought out, but when I typed it, it just looked horrible. . . good job yoshi
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This is wonderful and I love the rhyming scheme and your use of end rhymes, it flows just perfectly and with ease. The last line is a great twist on snow blindness and being blind to all except the feelings this conjures up, very clever
Kat xxxx -
This is lovely...makes me remember my own crisp december days. Thank you for putting such a wonderful time into a poem, i never really managed to capture that feeling. Excellent write!
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This is what I have been doing lately to make some VERY hard times not hurt so badly. Sweet memories are lovely bandaids for emotional wounds of hard times.
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i like how nature accompanies the special moment expressed in your poem. the details are good and exentuate the atmosphere of winter well. my favorite line "for I realized that we had survived the fall" because of the double meaning of the word 'fall' gives that entire stanza a two-dimensional quality to it. well done and keep writing
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Man, it's not fair! South Carolina hardly ever gets any snow, so I doubt I'll ever experince any such wonderful moment.
I think this is really well written. I don't usually like rhyming poetry, so the fact that I like this should tell you something
I could actually see in my mind two people playing around in the snow.
Man...I REALLY need to move further north
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