Many Applaud Youth,
Anonymously Yearning
Youth-anasia.
Author notes
I chose to do a Senryu, 5-7-5 syllable as an acrostic with a twist. I used poetic licence in the spelling youthanasia (euthanasia) ...
Written May 29th, 2004
A contest entry
- Form poetry time! by TheRainKing.
300 points, ended May 30, 2004, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very slick on the last line, a perfect example of how to use poetic license. Makes you think too, which is always my favorite kind of poetry
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Very unique and original, I like it even tho' I never count syllables. Nothing much else either. LOL. Good work, and thanks for your rave comment on SOLILUQUY UNO. jean
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What a delightful insightful play on words, and how well it applies to Mr. Bush, who daily is youth-inizing our young in futile, inept attempts to force his ways, all the while praising them for thier courage, and sacrifices made....loved this very much...Artis~ thanks for the typo alert on my last poem, my blood is typo I am afraid...LOL>..
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A very creative and clever write Ginger! Great play on words- enjoyed as always
Look forward to more! Thanks!
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Interesting and clever. Liked the spelling of youth-anasia.
Thanks for commenting on "Salty Flood".....
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I thought this was very well done, and I liked how you combined the two forms. My pc is in the shop and it's hard for me to comment on all the poems in the contest, but I liked this one. Thank you, Jason
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Excellent
Hi GingerandHoney:
Excellent play on words and I loved the combo of the acrostic and the senryu. Thanks for sharing that with us, I really thought it was very good. Bill -
Clever, for sure. The contrast of yearning for youth and death poses some interesting thoughts. People dying to be young comes on top, a thing that cosmeticians applaud, as the prevalence of beauty make-over TV shows hints. Why else would mercy-killing fit? Unless it has something to do with so much of the angst and cutting and suicidal thoughts that we see these days. But no matter. Better poems tend to stimulate thought, and it certainly succeeded in doing that! Good job!
Good luck in the contest. --Dee
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wonderful.......so clever and original.....kudos and applause to you....very good....play on words.....not enough words. Using the word MAY to do an accostic as well. wonderful
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I've never even seen this style before but already I'm intrigued
I loved this write.. short and sweet. Keep it up! -
I love the word 'youth-anasia' wow... what perspective here... good job on a great poem and good luck in the contest.
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senryu is a form of westernised haiku, which is a form of japanese wording using 5 syllables in the first line and 7 in the second and 5 again in the thrid , although this may vary. The difference we make in classifying senryu as opposed to haiku ( same syllabic count) is that haiku is usually about nature and nature-related subjects, whereas senryu does not deal with nature, but rather almost everything else to include concepts in thinking, and human nature, in particular, in an often satirical way. That is as near an explaination as I can give here although it is a bit more detailed than that. Here is a link to a proper explaination http://members.optushome.com.au/kazoom/poetry/senryu.html
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This piece clearly demonstrates your powerful control of words. You know how to use them, alter them...you know how to use your poetic license. Great job...very creative.
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This is a very good senryu. Good play on words. Best of luck in the contest to you.
~whisper
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Can you calrify for me what a senryu is? I would greatly appreciate it :-).
Thanks,
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I guess I should have said "Westernization" hahaha
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I like this! this is such a great Americanization of this form. I really think it is funny and creative.
Scott
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I want to learn Senryu. I'm learning new forms but is very facinated with Japenese form poetry. Haley27
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very pleasing work. i like the pun with youth-anasia, very clever. intesesting to read. deserves an applause
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That's most probably right, I think. I was wrong. But on the other one, I think it is Senryu. Hope that helps. And ya, an applause for you!
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Exquisite
What a grand pun you have on Euthanasia. The poem is a compact space has the same doleful wisdom of Dylan Thoma's "Fern Hill" -- that green is golden and even the young are in the throes of dying.
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Your poem gives some interesting reflections on youth, and their attitude.
I have read your author's note, but I am not yet satisfied that the syllable count is confirmed in the last line. Also, I would like you to confirm whether the spellings of the form are "Senyru"(which you have written) or "Senryu".
Edited on May 29, 3:59 p.m. because 'additional comments'.
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