Rain falls in violent showers
as it has for the past three days
my mind has drifted for countless hours
wondering how I came to change my ways
I always wore the latest styles
frequented the newest bar
on my face was a plastic smile
to go with my brand new car
One day I took a destined trip
into lands of green and goodness
and somehow the life of the tragically hip
just didn't seem to fit me best
Some might say I threw it all away
for cholesterol highs and cleaner air
but my happiness is evident in the way
I smile when they all turn to stare
And now I wear my baseball cap
though it's still a designer make
and laugh when my friends hear of the trap
I set to capture Fred, my new pet snake
So fate has given me a second chance
to live the life I never knew I longed for
The stars are shining and it's my turn to dance
on the other side of the slamming door
Author notes
Written May 28th, 2004
A contest entry
- Dazzle Me, Thrill Me, Wow Me... I Think You Get It...1-2 hour contest by whispernthedark.
300 points, ended May 29, 2004, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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AS A SONG ONCE SAID: SENSELESS IS PLEASURE NOTHING'S FOREVER..
YOU ARE A TALENTED MEN IT'S AMAZING HOW U COMBINED YOUR PAIN INTO AN INSPIRING POEM ,, TO COPE AND LIVE AGAIN ,,,
KEEP ON WRITING I LOVED THIS POEM
PASCALE
WOUNDED SCARS -
I always wore the latest styles
frequented the newest bar
on my face was a plastic smile
to go with my brand new car
The stars are shining and it's my turn to dance
on the other side of the slamming door
~these are my favorite lines. You fucking amaze me. Excuse me for cursing but .....You fucking amaze me! LOL Damn Im getting envious here of how talented you are. When youa re a well known writer, you better give me a free signed copy or we'll have problems! LOL~Daina
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Great job on this. Shed all those damn images and just live and be happy. Thank you so much for entering the contest.
~whisper
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So Pleased everything is going well for you josh and that you have found some stability and are happy
Kat xxxx -
Excellent yoshi, excellent. Sent shiveries up and down my spine. I'm thrilled to see you're enjoying yourself, and that you've come to be more in touch with your own emotions, rather than those around you. Good yoshi
I'm glad you're happy
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aaah, yes - the new american dream. chunk the rat race and just go be happy. beautifully expressed! -
This is just perfect..Money can't buy happiness - it's in the small things -- you've mastered the message
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i like this and the message it evokes that ultimately it is better to give trends and what is "in" a metaphorical finger and just be yourself and do what enjoy because it is the only way you reach a higher state of happiness. good job and keep writing
xo Pessimistic Optimism -
OH Joshua, this is great. Yep it is curious. Kind of like through The Looking Glass without the acid trip. Only you are climbing back through to reality now. Stuck too long in that make believe world. They do not call it LaLa Land for nothing. Welcome to the human race Joshua.
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