Encroaching flames
Coloured red
Thunderous clouds
Exploding lava
Ripping thorns
Choking, climbing ivy
Forceful water rushing from the broken dam,
The fierceness of the avalanche,
The rush of sound from an overpopulated tube station
The hurtling of waves after the eye of the storm ,
The pounding of fists on a table of oak.
ali-p
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I am me
Written May 28th, 2004
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This is excellent, good imagery, I feel what you feel, natures anger...maybe you could be inspired to write another one for my contest...
~Lilac~
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Encroaching flames is a very interesting and sure fire way to get any reader involved in this evocative piece of writing. Altleast this is what I got out of it hehe. Tony.
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this describes anger in such a creative way... great write.. thank you for the comment on my poem.
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argh...many visuals, all relating in some form to a force that cannot be stopped...except the last one...that oak table does not have to take your pounding...you can carve your initials into it unless your fistprints are more representative of you...i see...and see too much...
(can't imagine what the picture was, but I don't think it's necessary)
peace
Chris -
ali hey sweetie i would have to totally agree that this does describe anger and you have put it in the most perfect words i really dont think i could have written this any better...thank you for sharing...good luck in the contest..
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Wow, this really describes anger, and I see that some parts fit the description of your chosen background. This is very vivid to me, and I think you did a nice job here. You really talked about anger, in a non emotional way. I liked the way you could show it through nature, through slight violence, and through describing the background, and the authors comment, original, but at the same time unique. I'm used to your humour poems, and this is different, but I like it. Good luck in the contest.
Irilis
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