She sighed heavily,
Along with two or three muffled sobs.
A blank expression lies on her numbed face
As she stares straight ahead.
She sort of droops over her lanky body
And lets her wrinkly skin tremble vigorously
Blinking to calm herself.
She props her hands on her lap
As she watches the dark casket
Lower deep into the earth.
Author notes
Written May 27th, 2004
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Yes. a sad moment, caught in a picture of words. Nice, yet so sad. Good work, indeed.
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i hate it when people die, and this work of art captures that feeling you get when it happens. 10 out of 10.
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Awesome, like the writer!
Nice job Poopsie! i likes it. wonderful job teehee. Keep it up! by the way member we need to make our trip to Flandrau soon
teehee love you pookie! 
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Dark, deep, beautiful. I loved how descriptive this poem was. I could picture the person as i read it. Wonderful peice of literature.
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Awsome!
Very well done.. I could read the poem and it was very easily descriptive.. So much as for me to very easily subject myself into the poem and feel myself being lowered into the ground. The wording was very nicely done.. Although i'm a fan of rhyming poems this has braught me out of my box.. and for that I thank you..
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Excellent
great imagery and emotion in this peace. btw, i think you have a typo in the third line, maybe lie should be lies? great write.
~Kate -
wow i loved it! very dark and all that good shit. but yeah loved it loved it loved it keep it up! laterz ~x2c~
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good
I liked the flow of this piece.. dark and cold.. in many aspects.. slight touch of feeling. Great write.
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dark, yes.. and i liked how ya gave the person out and made people see them just as they were right in front of you.. makes ya feel there and seeing the same thing and suffering.. nice job brittany!
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oohhh.......very descriptive. I like that.
~~Blinking to calm herself.~~
I have not seen that expression in other works yet. I like how you draw a great mental picture in your poems.
Very, Very nicely done.
Very expressive....
Keep up the good works.
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