It's almost funny.
How easily the tears spring
How easily this heart of steal breaks.
I act so tough.
Pretending nothing bothers me.
Yes, I'm never scared.
I never cry.
Crying is for weak people.
And I'm not weak...
I don't feel emotions such as those.
Oh no... not me...
But now everything's changed.
You're honest, my love...
Brutally honest.
And you know just how to do it.
How to tear down my walls.
Break my heart.
And leave me to cry...
You're quite good at it.
Look at me...
Don't turn away.
I'm lying here.
Crushed like a butterfly that hit a windshield.
My stained glass wings.
No longer can carry me.
To save me...
I'm left cold and defenseless.
Awaiting a devastating death.
And there's no one to rescue me...
Since you are no longer here.
Since you no longer care.
I... wish you cared.
I'm not the tough girl.
Everyone sees.
I can't take this pain much longer.
It... hurts...
And so I cry... no... sob.
My heart aches.
You ripped me into pieces.
You slashed my wings.
And left me to die.
I'm not the girl in your dreams...
I know...
And I'm sorry...
I'm so sorry...
I never meant to disappoint you...
Author notes
poisons my intoxication
Written May 27th, 2004
A contest entry
- One night of a dark love by ForNever.x.
400 points, ended August 2, 2005, 32 entries
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You spelled "steel" wrong in "How easily this heart of steal breaks." This poem felt very cliche to me. There were a couple things I liked, but most of it I felt like I had read before.
~Angi -
An Amaizing write! I loved the power! This made me speechless, not only do I feel exactly the same way but you took the whole idea of this contest and flew with it, if that makes any sense at all! You have done everyhting i asked for and more. I loved this poem!
I especially liked this part:
Crushed like a butterfly that hit a windshield.
My stained glass wings.
No longer can carry me.
To save me...
I'm left cold and defenseless.
Awaiting a devastating death.
And there's no one to rescue me...
Since you are no longer here.
Since you no longer care.
I... wish you cared.
I know it's a long part but it's the part that stood out to me the most
oh nd this part:
can't take this pain much longer.
It... hurts...
And so I cry... no... sob.
My heart aches.
You ripped me into pieces.
You slashed my wings.
And left me to die.
I'm not the girl in your dreams...
I know...
And I'm sorry...
I'm so sorry...
I never meant to disappoint you...
Any more and I'll write the whole poem on here lol!
I loved your ending, I loved it all! I can't say anything bad, because there is nothing bad about this poem!
I loved it
Good luck in the contest.
xxx -
oh this is heart shattering
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This is a beautiful poem. I'm sorry I can't say more, it's just heart-shattering... Wow.
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I really liked this steph. its beautiful and filled with such sweet pain. I really felt so much sadness through each word. Very touching write
~Laura
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stephanie, I really wnjoyed this poem. I aint sayin this to act as if it is to me or anything but I want you to know that I miss you and my love for you is still the same. I talked to your cousin and I found out something... I just want to say I am sorry that I was a boring person to you.
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Wow, this is beautiful. The imagery is gorgeous - "stained glass wings"...
"I'm not the tough girl.
Everyone sees.
I can't take this pain much longer.
It... hurts...
And so I cry... no... sob.
My heart aches."
Amazing lines, amazing poem -
A beautiful poem....peroid...just beautiful...
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