A] if Guilt is the Father of Fear,
B] and guards have no guilt, then
C] Bastards
View lonely forgotten armor
These sun-emblazoned walls
That sleekly belies
A beautiful body
Whose skin-deep radiance
Protects a weary groan
Sleeping through earthquakes, I HAVE no pain?
Anonymous Grecian statues?
Or reflective pools without ripples
YOU FREAKISH IMPOSTERS!
Pristine. So very, very still & clean.
Permit missing what matters
Beneath the armor
Please, let me grow!
'It's only a job' paychecks
Bleed from our brows and
Scar our callouses
While advanced careers
Right-e-ous-ly
Disguise materialism
I'm glad THEY got caught!
Friday barrooms shine with crooked smiles
Cajoling wartime Desk-Joke-ies
Inebriated on sweat and blood
Slosh onward
Toward Nirvana
Hangovers
Why am I alone? God loves me, BUT?! F U!
Gloating and bloating
Abandoned souls as sponges floating
Upon a shallow justice
Of STATISTICAL ecstacy
Written in tarpit accuracy
THIS is an 'State of the Art' facility
What's the MEAN-ING of my life?
Yet within, within and deeper within yet again!
Suddenly sharpened shadows like daggers lunge
Into embattled survivors, niether
Seen NOR heard! No forrest! No trees!
Slink now you great hearald of human isolation.
Come now, come feed the 'Art of the State'!
Can I BE evil, PLEASE (I'm a "foregone conclusion"?)?
Sons of "American" Eagles,
Canneried in sounproof cages!
Singing in the coal mines, as they cough up
Societal knowledge of love of good of evil!
Because 'just Us' flows discordantly like blood~
Into a greedy, greedy pool!
Spare change, mistah?
Who will step from the shadows, the dead alive?
Memorable children yearn once only
To live that question,
without answers through ourselves
Their past
Future
I forgive you?
Suicide!
(crying for your children)
ROFLMAO!
Author notes
Is this too negative?
Written October 5th, 2001
In a list
A contest entry
- F......u! by Autonomy.
500 points, ended September 27, 2004, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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As I read this
I almost felt it was something written while you set there held captive and knowing what all goes on, yet not a lot you could do. I felt anger, yet pain, and emotion. You truly caught my attention on this write.
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this was a powerful poem
with guilt and anger
but your words held one captive
this was awsome
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I changed this so many times...I should rewrite it once more and then leave it alone. LOL!
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awsome
ooh very deep and wonderful, powerful poem.. -
Gutty..
Wow....I relate. Here's one I recited at a coffee house where I also participated in Sunday guitar jam:
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Thank you. I wanted to illustrate how some people can be so cold, so heartless...
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I'm with you, ET. Guilt makes shadows of our true selves. What is presented to the world is an acceptable robot, unoffensive and non-controversial. Whatever glorious streaks of strangeness we possess (in this society) must be hidden.
What a crock, huh? Excellent, thought-nudging piece. -
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I WAS ASKED TO WRITE ABOUT ANGER TO SOMEONE TRYING TO UNDERSTAND WHAT ANGER IS. uNTIL YOU'RE WILLING TO LAUGH AT THE MOST BRUTAL PAIN OF SOMEONE LOSING A LOVED-ONE...YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND OR APPRECIATE TRUE, UNDILLUTED ANGER.
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SOOO GOOOD!
do you listen to lamb of god? cause ultimately the first album was almost sillhouette mentioned in this fine piece of art. i thought i wrote like them! i still think that but you have literally recreated a piece that could have been on there first record, lyrically speaking that is. excellent and well done job here... lamb of god is my favorite band so if it were up to me i would choose you as the winner! bye! -
Is there even such a thing as 'too negative'? I do not think so. And though it seems to be a little esoteric, I am one who believes that poems, like everything else, only mean what you interpret them as. So if a person is to truly understand the meaning of a poem, they must contrive that meaning from within themselves. As the saying goes, in order for a writing to truly be great, the reader must suffer with the writer. Great Work. Amazing.
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ahhh '87...the year i was born! was a good year!
hee hee...too negative? nahhhh i don't think so, but then again this is coming from the viewpoint of a "troubled youth" so take it for what it's worth....heh...
The Fraud
Edited on Sep 23, 4:29 p.m. because 'baaaaaaah humbug'. -
This was so so so good. And to answer your question no it wasn't to negative because what more better a way to express yourself other than in writing.
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Powerful
You shouldn't keep your feelings all bottled up like that...
Joking aside, this was a very powerful, very emotive work of art. I liked the rage that eminated from this. It also had something of a disjointed quality to it that I think is very reflective of the nature of anger. This is an excellent peice of writing on a variety of levels. Good Work
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well i can most certainly say that this write was far beyond my wisdom. the words were beautifully put together...
whoa, it really just blew me away.
wonderful job here.
alwaz~BB -
don't touch it!
wOw...
you know its saturday
and cartoons are on...
and now i have to focus?
beep beep...
we are to be held acountable
for our own actions...
guilt? ahhh
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excellent
It's not too negitive..it's beautifully written, though it somewhat dampened my cheery mood, but some poetry is meant to do that. I enjoyed reading it though..anyhow, you commented on one of my poems and asked to send it to people-thats fine so long as you'd put my name on it =) since you dont know my name, and I'd prefer not to post it on here, feel free to email me at niftychick2001@msn.com and I'll send ya anything u want to know.
thanks a ton,
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I wrote this poem in 87. One of the last I wrote for a long time. I believe guilt holds people back and says that we do not believe God is loving enough to let us receive life on life's terms. The scriptures says happy is the (man) who condemneth not the thing which {he} alloweth. The only power Satan (call it what you will) has over me is in making me believe I am not where I am supposed to be to glean the greatest blessings from life that I can absorb. God loves me and wants what is best for me. Nothing is wasted in God's economy. No matter how far down the scale I may have gone, I can always use it to help someone else from making the same mistake. This philosophy in no way exonerates me from accountability for my actions. To the contrary, it helps me admit my defect and shortcomings. Life is too short to be beset by much. There is always time to love in my life, and no time for anytime else. No that I live up to that, but that is certainly the commandment. I try. OK, my friend, why do you ask if I eat artichocks? I do respect your prespective. If you have ideas, please feel free to share. I will accomodate if persuaded. I can be scattered, I do admit.
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Picture of King Darius and his soldiers viewing Daniel??? Beautiful art there! -
excellent
Hmmmmm...Lordless, Guilt may be the father of fear. But without it, there is another culprit that can be far worse to the spirit.
Your poetry is levels above my thinking, although I somehow still 'touch' its presence. I just wish there were two or more solid possibilities in the ambiguity. This one was one of my fav's as far as clarity. I have ideas.
Do you eat artichokes????
Blessings, CookieZeal/DB
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Your lack of maudlinism intrigues me. It's very refreshing to read you. -
don't touch it!
This is a truly amazing peice of art. I think that while it's long, if you cut it short, then it would lessen the power behind your words.
-Daisuke -
don't touch it!
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don't touch it!
ooo no not too negative it is good and built up and everything and it was awesome!
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absolutely wild. i love the tone,but as for meaning... i'm not quite getting it. (not exactly a bad thing) really, the presentation was exquisite. i loved your choice of words.
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wonderfully written
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Long read but well worth it!!!! thanks for sharing.
Shalom, Love and (((hugs))) -
very profound and intense...really built up! thankyou i enjoyed....ashley
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