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Green Eyes

Her full lips slay me.  

She’s green-eyed and owns my soul.  

But she’s my flower.

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This, I have to say, is slightly more personal, but is still part of the same study.
Written May 26th, 2004

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  • Yemassee gold member
    October 12

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    Well, for guys, women are always good studies, confounding too. I don't like "slay" in line one for it's trite, too often used, though I do know the feeling of a woman who completely captures our imagination...I know it well right now.

  • Madam Vixen
    June 28, 2004
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    i love that. her full lips slay me... beautiful


  • GeGen DaeMon
    June 26, 2004
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    If you'd ever heard of a Haiku you'd know
    why it was short.

    Thanks anyway.

  • LaDiE FLAvA
    June 26, 2004
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    ermmmmmm.. although it was short, it was intresting!


  • Lurie
    May 27, 2004
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    OHHH Have I ever seen a KU from you before???? I am very impressed!!! It's beautiful I'm feeling that this has to do with that tid bit of news you gave me the other day! (SMILES) it's all good sweety!!! Ya know I love ya and me eyes are very green LOL ~eL


  • witchyflyer
    May 26, 2004
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    mmm. I like this.
    Short poems are typicaly le crap, but this is nice.
    It's actually amazing how much imagry you can fit into three lines, and the concept is great.
    So I applaud you.
    -Chelsea

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