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Friend

Hating
Scraping
Breaking
Aching
Do you like me hating, scraping you?
You love to be breaking, aching me

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Written on 25th May 2004 at 17:41 GMT

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A contest entry

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  • babygirl7
    April 5, 2005
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    good

    good

  • x garamChai
    January 17, 2005
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    hmmm, somehow I don't see this as powerful as your other poem, Don't Leave Me...but I guess I like it...and if this was for a contest, then that's perfectly fine--it's lovely overall, but if the contest is over, I think maybe you should elaborate on it a little more...nice write


  • rocker4me
    January 17, 2005
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    Wow. So cool. IT was short, and deep. I loved it. The form was so cool! I loved how it all tied together. It was so captivating. Wonderful Work. You have talent. Keep on Keepin on.
    .:Rocker4me:.


  • Samplette gold member
    May 25, 2004
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    A nice write, with the correct form.
    Thank you for entering.
    Sam