The Night I Lost My Virginity (18 Senryus) by lordoftherings at All poetry

~by Gregg Rowe~

a four letter word
copulates with a three letter
begets pure joy

time lapses, magical
roots sprout for crowning my
glistening mushroom head

versatile hand, Jack
of all trades, masterful
in pleasing oneself

nine inches I beat
transfiguring into a
Bird of Paradis

predawn beauty, why
'tis early with dangerous
strokes, wake you me

oh, but my eye peers
through soft darkness, seeks the
pathway to Northern Lights

rub gently, least you
will rouse from its dream my
slumbering one-eyed one

restless fingers with
twenty-twenty night vision
trace love's geography

skin, i do not brand
thee sinful, to taste upon
the tip of my tongue

perk...satin silk honey
dew melon halves, succulent
inviting

a skin from a young
goat, protecting-pleasuring
simultaneously

my thighs muscular
powerful, pillars of pleasure
sprightly link up

glove like, comfort fit
magically adamant
enters love-soaked sponge

now in warm moist rave
luscious dancers leer
from a drawn out phallus

starkly tall, lone standing
pleasure's fountain spills
out precious melody

compress curls absorb
collision after collision
shock after shock

lips to lips, nose
to nose, nipple to nipple, navel
to navel...fuse

who could guess in all
thy humbleness, thou could
bloom to exquisiteness

Author notes

Yes! It was with a woman! at the age of 18, hence the title and progressin of the stanzas.

A Japanese poem similar to the Haiku with a possible but not limited to the 17-syllable rule. Whereas a Haiku requires you to allude to a season or time and must include nature verses humankind or humankind versus humankind or nature versus nature, the Senyru is more lenient and requires only that you poke fun at society or politics and this is still out for debate but I write them anyways, if a Senyru can be erotic or not.

Written May 23rd, 2004

In a list

Canadian Phrases (Senryus) • next in list

A contest entry

Erotic Exercise! (Not literally) by Pussy Kat. 300 points, ended February 25, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

What did you think

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CountryCousin
March 25, 2005
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Very good
Boy this is a good erotic read and hey I once used the term mushroom for a description of the head. It has been a cold rainy day and I have arthritis but this did warm up the page. You really have a very sensitive and finely tuned write here on the subject of lovemaking.
jennjenn
February 15, 2005
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wouldn't it just be great if all first times were pleasant like this? idk, maybe it just seems pleasant because it sounds so good in this...senyru...format. i had never heard of it before, but it sounds very good. i'm not one to write poems with form, i'm not creative enough and don't have the vocabulary. i'm glad to see there are still poets out there who are able to stick to a form and still write something moving. great job ^_^
Harlequin Bunny
February 6, 2005
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Wow, that is very impressive .. it's difficult to keep a comprehensive thread going through so many short poems, like senryu, or haiku .. and yet you still managed to keep each one as it's own unique little poem, which is even more impressive. The imagery is almost abstract, you have an interesting approach to some words .. mingling the dirty little phrases (I giggled when I read "one-eyed one" and "love sponge") with conceptual beauty ("pleasure's fountain spills out precious melody", and the entire first senryu, for that matter) and on the whole I'd say it's a decidedly 1st place poem .. of course, I'm not the one judging, so who am I to say?
lordoftherings
February 5, 2005
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Hehehe: You said bi-sexuality and since I have had a few encounters in my life with the opposite sex, although I prefer the same sex, I took you up on the challenge. Next time you host a contest I will submit a really rauchy gay one for you but thought I would keep with the rules this time around. Glad you enjoyed and will finish the rest of this assignment tomorrow. Really tired now. Gregg PS Good luck with the entries and the contest.
nakedlyrics
February 5, 2005
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great
This was a great poem and i got alot of great imagery from this piece..... however i was not expecting it to be with a woman coming from you lol But hey thats cool Im open goodluck and thank you very much for entering!
J Rhys Davies
September 17, 2004
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Each and every one of these would do justice unto itself even if they would have been submitted individually. This is an excellent collection of this form. I keep hearing about you and wondering what all the hub-bub is about. Now I see. I will be back for more, you can take that to the bank.
lordoftherings
July 30, 2004
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Hi DefinitiveFreak:

Below is a link for further explanantion on haikus and Senyrus, a column I wrote awhile back but still pertains to writing and you would be able to have a better grasp of the similarties and the differences between the two genres although they originate in the same country. Gregg

allpoetry.com/Column/602333
DefinitiveFreak
July 29, 2004
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The senyru is new to me! Wow, I'm learning so much from all the entries I've read so far, it's amazing. Thanx for entering an erotica piece, I knew you would be the one to put a unique spin on it! Thanx again for entering.
Gaffer
July 29, 2004
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nice write, cool way to use the senyru
thepawn hits
June 10, 2004
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This was a really cute poem, I thought. You took such a simple subject such as losing your virginity, and made an absolutely beautiful poem from it. Your word choice was perfect. I was glued to my screen the whole way through..and I especially loved this:
lips to lips, nose
to nose, nipple to nipple, navel
to navel...fuse

Lovely visual with that, too. hehe. Well, I'll be wrapping this up now. So, keep writing..although I'm sure you will anyway I'll be reading.
Edited on Jun 10, 10:24 p.m. because ''.
bambie k2004
May 30, 2004
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yes Gregg it is a wonderful and ummm (clears throat_ thoughtful write..Made me think..winks...This is a great piece of work ...I love your poems..especially your erotica..for both ways..gay or straight..You just have that special touch...Yeah yup touch..lol Beautiful work ... Best of luck in the contest..
Much love
Bambie
Onyx Dragon
May 23, 2004
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yes Gregg..It's us women's loss. You sure you dont go both ways? I love you Gregg, and this write was awesome. Then again, all of yours are.
lordoftherings
May 23, 2004
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I am so glad as a gay man that I can still turn on women, I guess it is because I had the experience first and still remember it
pyrocat
May 23, 2004
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hmmmmmm, interesting. sounds like a super romantic time for you both, how come my cherry popping wasent this nice? were you dreaming? lol, anyway, the form was a change of pace for me to read, but i really enjoyed it. the wording was elaborate and fit the peice nicely. thanks for shareing this intimate moment with all of us! -cat-
lordoftherings
May 23, 2004
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Oh kewls, betty boop she always makes me laugh...and yep long update but I want to be here tomorrow after 4 pm for awhile so come on then, should be here until about eight, writing and chatting...wanted to post my poem tonight...funny I am so horny yet am about to have a major surgery can hardly wait to see the registered nurse for another shave
-theheartofme-
May 23, 2004
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how is it...that i am so turned on by your writings.. i guess you just have a way with your words, course i see visions in my minds eye when i read what you write. spectors of bodies, touching, mating in my mind and it is always beautiful.
May 23, 2004
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phew...would go take a cold shower after this one...but with all the lightening all around, i think i'll just fan myself!
thought you were still in the hospital? guess i should go to your author page and see if there are updates. oh...have some boop stuff for you...heading your way via email!
lots of healing hugs,
~liz