In a darkened room
sit two silhouettes
A shape on a shelf
is covered in the dust of arbitrary days
and lonely nights
It does not shine
as it did when it was new
the dust and lack of attention
seem to push it higher above their heads
But it is still there,
just a little out of reach
Its beauty will be close again
with a little work
But they sit stagnant
consumed with life
He doesn't offer her a leg up
so she doesn't clean it
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Written May 23rd, 2004
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wow, dont know what that meant for you but to me it paints a picture of two people stuck in a rut, not happy with their relationship but nor are they willing to improve it, instead of facing it they sit in the dark and pretend it isnt there. as silhouettes they could be shadows of their former selves, both of them lonely together but too scared to part because of what is outside that darkened room, when in fact they could take each others hand and lead each other outside and face their fears together. on the other hand, I could be talking bollocks, I do that a lot. I really liked that though. excellent. michael.x (I'm not related to malcolm.x, the x was a kiss)
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this was really nice.. a lil on the wierd side, but i really liked it.. there's an honesty that runs through it that caught my attention.
But they sit stagnant
consumed with life
those being my favorite two lines. -
hug for Jo... I actually think this may be one of your best. you know I'm here. always. see you very soon my love! xxx
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Wow- that is unbelievable honesty. And in truth it is that honesty that will act as the polish. Do not worry that the srping cleaning won't happen, it will. I love you Rxxxx
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Do I understand this?
I don't know.
But in spite of that, I like it. I always like your work. I never find fault with it.
Hummmm. I hope you are ok my lovely.
We HAVE to meet when you get back. Promise me? All my hugs etc Lynnie xxxxx
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