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Sorrow to take

fallen further then before
with wings once flew, they ripped and tore
now you lay upon the ground
weeping tears that make no sound
the smell of dirt, the smell of blood
a face stained with tears, that shower a flood
Of endless pain and a heart that broke
Still yet you hold back, the tears you choke
and you ask yourself, what are you going to do?
What are you going to turn to?
Thats when you made your choice
You couldn't take the pain, the sorrow, the people, nor the voice
You turned to "it" to hide it all
to try to stop, this pain to stall
but yet it stays when you made that decision
You still look at life with a hateful vision
"it" is not your friend
"it" can cause your life to end
Your covered in a haze thats taken hold of you
You make the wrong choices, and cut; you still do
if you had the choice, existence be it may
you wouldn't want to live another day
But they hold you back, the people you love and care
Becuase you know it will kill them if your not there
You want to fall asleep and never wake
if only someone came along, for this sorrow to take

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Written May 23rd, 2004

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  • StrandsInYourEyes
    June 19, 2004
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    loved.

    "But they hold you back, the people you love and care
    Becuase you know it will kill them if your not there
    You want to fall asleep and never wake
    if only someone came along, for this sorrow to take"

    love those last lines ... love the whole poem in general, i relate so well. only i don't cut .. i've come too close, i've taken a few too many pills, i've drank a little much ... but yeah. anyway - you captured this so well. nicely done (ps- if u happen to read any of my poems .. i dont suggest "secret truth" that and a couple others are .. pretty crappy. haha)