Among the other kids lonely I stood,
listening to the laughing, chattering crowd,
longing again to talk with a friend.
Out by the shore I sat alone in peace,
looking at the crashing, sparkling seas,
resting, gazing out to sight's end.
Author notes
This poem has a freer sound structure than I usually use. A different structural principle predominates: a parallelism in content and grammar between the first and second stanzas.
Once again, the date is only accurate to within a month or so.
Written February 15th, 2001
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"longing again to talk with a friend."
yeah...i like the contrasts as well, its very short! maybe almost too short...I wish it would have been longer...anyways nice write, and keep it up. -
Thanks, celexa!
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i really like this, the two diff. scenes, the contrast, and yet simillarities of the two part sin the poem.
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Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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I really enjoyed this poem!
You did a very good job on it.
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Thanks. "Sweet" wasn't exactly the effect I was hoping for, but I won't complain. I guess the last stanza tones down the sting of the first stanza.
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good
aw thats sweet. I see what you mean about a freer sound structure, but its good nontheless.
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