Stand silently,
My mirror and observe –
One solo image moves
To pas de deux
Two lefts now join two rights.
One flickers, two ignite,
As toasted dreams
Now swirl
Two fill one glass.
The dancers come together
But then pass
Through Manu scripted minuet
Hand touchingly,
Some delicate,
To miniate the margins of my mind,
As fingers round one thought
Do intertwine.
Author notes
Reflections of sharing
In response to questions:
Manu - the source of human knowledge in the Hindu religion
Miniate - The decorative initial letters in a manuscript
Pas de deux - a dance with two partners
Written May 21st, 2004
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very delicate yet elaborate peice of work..I loved reading it..
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Sun and moon, dark and light, day and night... In human terms, you've captured the halves that make whole perfectly.
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Very well done, and very creative. A great read...gives a lot to think about...I think
Sam
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passionate imagery it really got me seeing from your eyes beautifully done
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Bravo! :f
The dance imagery connected instantly for me -- I just finished performing in a ballet and wrote a poem for the two principal dancers.
You also capture the parallel imagery of the mirror well and the thoughtful expansion into the metaphysic is extremely well handled and gracefully executed
. Bravo!
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Very gracefully written...love the dance imagery (and thanks for explaining some of those terms).
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ah, the deep side of a poet is the most interesting. the wonders of how they could put such words together and create a masterpiece such as this is mindboggling. this is a great poem for imagery. i was a little confused with the To pas de deux line. i'm not sure what it means or is supposed to mean. but hey, it is a great piece even if you leave it out. i like the way you describe everything that is reflected and what is going on. it is a great poem. so deep as well. it almost has a hint of the dark side to it. great job.
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Ok, I'm having a very deep day, so the opening just slew me. Great stuff..then this part...Two lefts now join two rights.
One flickers, two ignite,....I hope I don't get in trouble for saying this, but right fucking on. I loved it. Everything after that part just drew me into the swirl. I'm gonna go print this up and read it about 50 more times.
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"Objects in the mirror are closer than they appear."
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wow, do i need to say more? simplly wow. well done.
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Very beautiful and yet kind of mysterious on exactly what you are writing about. It could be about life or sensual. I really like it and it reminds me of a fantsy book like through the looking glass or something.
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Oh this is gorgeous. the descriptions you use here are eloquence in its best form. but one question remains, at least for me: is the mirror the partner, or simply an observer?
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Beautiful absolutely beautiful, all of it, such an accurate discription. Yet airs a bit of a mystical touch. nice write.
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oh WOW... beautiful... to me it's like life... the way lives intertwine... so elegant and beautiful
GREAT POEM!
Trin
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Classical
More of the quiet elegance that has marked your recent work. Subtle theme, almost secret. I really liked the mood of movement within the poem that, somehow, included the opening "Stand silently, My mirror". This begs the question, which is the real and which the image? - which you have neatly answered :
" The dancers come together
But then pass."
Very, very deep work - if you want it to be...
Best.
p
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sexy scribble... Manu scriptted is juicy and kinda cute.
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really good
this poem was really good. it had good rythm and good flow. keep up the good work so that we can read it! and it is really good! -
This was a great piece! I loved it!!! oh... wri te more like this please! ~EDge<3
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wow... deep. excellent, I love it.
love
amy
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Interesting, I was contemplating just moments ago a poem about a "symmetrical lover" .. Sharing is such an amazing gift and so often overlooked or forgotten in relationships of any kind, when in reality, a relationship really IS SHARING and it is quite easy to do! I thoroughly enjoyed this ..it is crisp and not overdone. Lovely read for a rainy afternoon. Peace, Lisa
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The dancing image from this reflection is surreal. I can see this very vividly. Your wording choices are staunch and the poem itself leaves me in awe. Excellent write my friend. Very stunning.
Much Love,
Renee
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Elegant and graceful.
Dear Jane,
The sumptuous elegance of this verse with its baroque, nay quasi-rococo ornamentation can barely elude the reader's comprehension. The imagery is both graceful and eloquent.
There is but one single aspect that I fail to understand:
Your reflection keeps on dancing when you stop to hold my hand!
May I, with my walking stick, snoop behind your mirror?
Purely, of course, to miniate my mind.
You are aware of my great predilection for minueture and anatomical art in general, both left and right.
Love, hugs and applause, XXX Hugh.
Edited on May 21, 11:11 p.m. because 'Forgot full-stop.'.
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