Oh Lord how blissfull is this day;
How sweet this very hour.
When I before Thy face shall say,
This sacred marriage vow.
All radiantly stands next to me
his face alight with love -
My love, my husband soon to be
with blessing from above.
My prayer to Thee has always been,
that if one day I care,
for someone that he also in,
my love for Thee will share.
I met a man who's love sublime,
joy to my life has brought;
One day he told me since his prime,
he prayed as I did, Lord!
That we have met has shown to me,
Thou hast performed a wonder;
What Thou in prayerfull lifes let be,
will never be a blunder.
And now we are about to take,
This vow that e'er shall bear,
Thy seal that no mere man can break,
just death apart can tear.
Just as the bride of Thy dear Son
is one with Him above,
So let us Lord, now merge as one,
bound by our mutual love.
Author notes
A poem I wrote for a friend of mine for her wedding day.
Written May 21st, 2004
A contest entry
- Wisdom and Prayers by MargaretG.
300 points, ended May 30, 2004, 18 entries
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I really Really Like this. Very well done.
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I looked for a column on the second person singular pronoun and didn't see one. So I wrote it. I hope it is helpful.
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I bow before your superior knowledge, ma'am! A memoriabe lesson. I have made the changes accordingly. I hope it meets with your approval.
The only exposure I have to this form of English is in my King James version of the Bible (which I read often) and of course from the Bard's works (which I do not read that often!).
A column would certainly be very helpful. I often prefer to write my poems in this form and as you have pointed out, I still need a bit of spit 'n polishing!
Thanking you,
B-T-B.
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Brad, we are talking about usage which is archaic and little used. People have not used the second person familiar for several hundred years, and my parents surely did not! So like you, this part of English grammar is not my mother tongue either!
You are right about the singular, he allows, but so am I, I allow. We might try to understand an unspoken auxilliary verb such as Thou wouldst allow, using the infinitive instead of conjugating allow. While we are at it, "Thou hast performed a wonder". This is an area of a lot of misunderstanding in poetic writing, and I would love to see a column on it.
Once again I congratulate you on your poem, all the more impressive since English is not your first language.
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Thanks for pointing out my mistakes, Peaseeker.
I fixed the repetition in Stanza 3 but I'm not too sure what you mean by "allow is better than allows". Surely "Thou" is singular and therefore it should be "allows"? Please correct me if I'm wrong (English is not my mother tongue, so I probably have it all muddled up!). -
very good
Very very good. I like this because I'm hoping that brad-the-bard has a surprise in store for me next time I see him. -
Well done
Oh I like the suggestions Peaseeker made...especially about allowst. This is a lovely wedding day poem and what is even more lovely is if such a meeting of one's life partner is the fruit of both the husband and wife's prayers. So often you will hear one or the other say this and how lovely to have the meeting of two hearts through prayer. 
Edited on May 21, 2:54 p.m. because ''. -
This is lovely and hopeful, showing confidence and faith! This is what we wish for all our daughters (since I have sons, I hope for daughters-in-law!)
Stanza 3 repeats will; "he'll also in, my love for Thee will share."
Stanza 5, careful of spelling and verb conjugation: "What Thou in prayerfull lifes allows" should be What Thou in prayerful life (or lives) allowst. (Pretty sure; allow is better than allows.)
Overall, a very pleasant and happy poem, full of hope for the future. Thanks for entering our contest.
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i love the language you used here - it is a brilliantly placed piece.
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Amen !!
god bless the couple
i'll remember this poem when i get married
good write
thanks for sharing
lekha
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Very Good
This was a sweet poem and very very well written you have great talent and i hope to read your other work if you would like you could read some of my work as well ok thank you and god bless and keep writing -
Wow.
Wow... Now I'm kind of scared to ever get married... EVER...
But this is Uber good, I mean... I feel like this girl is real...
Wow.
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