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Mon Redempteur- Il Vive!

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Qui est-ce qu’il le dieu?

Il y a un Amour parce-qu’il est seule-
plus de tout monde entier.

~selah~
Et combien de personnes sont comme toi?
Ne personne, mon Cher!
Je suis la votre.

Tu te fais un nom-
pas de nome du plume
mais Le Tout est
authentique
le Tant

Ou est le plus grande qui
est mort sur le croix?

aucune-

Je suis embrassé toujours,

Toujours!  (Edited) Thank you, Flaming Sky and lilMissMuffet!



Original

Qui est-ce qu’il le dieu?
C’est l’un Amour parce-qu’il est seulement.
plus de tout monde entier.
      selah
Et combien comme toi?
Ne personne, mon Cher!
Je suis veuillez agréer.
 
Tu se fait un nom-
pas de nome du plume
mais Le Tout est
authentique
le Tant

Ou est le maxima qui
morte sur le crosse?

aucune

Je suis embrasse toujours,
Toujours!


L'Anglais

Who is God?
There is one Love because he is alone
more than the whole world.

And how many are like you?
No one, my Love!
I am sincerely yours.

You've made a name for yourself-
not a pen name
but everything is
real
omniscient.

Where is the greatest who
dies on a cross?

no one

I am held forever,
always!

Author notes

Painting-Michelangelo Buonarroti

Edited by Flaming Sky. Thank you again!

Written May 19th, 2004

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  • Sherry gold member
    May 20, 2004
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    Simply Devine

    Cookie,
    Simply beautiful dear, shows there is noone as Christ and His love and nothing is more greater then Him or that he gives us. In this world this was humble tender and filled with a love in tribute to Our Savior a very nicely reflected crafted piece.
    Love and hugs,Sherry


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    May 20, 2004
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    It is FINE! I'm very glad you did it. Thank you. I will make the needed changes! Bless you, CookieZeal/DB


  • TanyaB
    May 20, 2004
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    This a wonderful little piece. May I be so bold and to correct the French in this poem? I'll place it on your author page so as not to hog points here.


  • Flaming Sky
    May 20, 2004
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    Sorry, I had to put it in a reply message because I couldn't figure out how to do more than one line in the IMs. Here's what the poem might look like in grammatically correct French (I tried to retain your meanings of the words, so please don't shoot me ):

    Qui est Dieu?
    Il y a un Amour parce-qu’il seulement est
    plus de tout monde entier.
    selah
    Et combien de personnes sont comme toi?
    Ne personne, mon Cher!
    Je suis la votre.

    Tu te fais un nom-
    pas de nome du plume
    mais Le Tout est
    authentique
    le Tant

    Ou est le plus grande qui
    est mort sur le crosse?

    aucune

    Je suis embrassé toujours,
    Toujours!

  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    May 20, 2004
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    Oh Please do. It's been years, and I just wanted to see if I could do it. Please IM me the errors! Thank you for reading, Warmly, CookieZeal

  • Flaming Sky
    May 20, 2004
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    tres belle

    Because I speak French, there's a few grammatical things you might want to change... I'm not sure if you're interested in changing it, though. It's very beautiful indeed. Keep on writing.

    - sky.


  • Dolce
    May 20, 2004
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    This is beatiful, I'm still trying to take it al in. I wish I could understand french! thanks for translating it.

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