Whilst through the air piercing thy heart
for the sorrow dread tears thou never to part
and the cold ice blue descending to be
for they call with terror screaming to thee
thy light to melt to disappear into the never
for all the sorrow brought fourth, always and forever
Author notes
Written May 19th, 2004
A contest entry
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300 points, ended June 15, 2004, 57 entries
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Thank you, I checked out your poetry also, you also have talent, and great work
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Terrific poem. I really liked it. I loved the rhyme scheme you used, you're very clever with your words. Keep on writing, you've got talent.
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This poem suggest to me that one demise is eternal suffering
which is sort of a wake up call to the living, it let's you
know you still have a choice. thy light to melt to disappear
into the never is a very powerful line. excellent writing -
This was nice... hope to be reading more from u.
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