Dear Dad,
Christmas isn't what,
It used to be.
Just you, me
And our Christmas tree.
Sitting by the fire,
Watching the snow fall,
It's nothing like it used to be.
Nothing at all.
When you were here,
We'd sing and play
Laugh out loud,
Night and day.
We'd decorate the house,
From end to end,
And hang our stockings,
On the mantel's end.
Christmas Eve came,
We all went to bed.
Thoughts of joy, love and peace,
All in our heads.
When morning arose,
We'd all awake
We'd open our stockings
We thought you were great!
We'd have our feast
Of turkey and ham,
The family together,
Hand in hand.
Then one day you left me,
I don't understand why
And since that day,
I've cried, and cried, and cried.
I'm fifteen years old,
I feel like I'm two.
I cry every night,
I cry for you.
But I know one day,
Years from now,
We'll be together.
Together somehow.
In heaven we'll be,
Together at last
Living for the present,
Remembering our past.
I love you Dad,
So until that day
I must behave,
I'll spend Christmas
At your grave.
Love,
Your Daughter
In a list
A contest entry
- Father Figure by Prince Charming.
300 points, ended May 21, 2005, 21 entries
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Sweet, sad and sentimental. Your poem is filled with emotional moments. It is quite effective and well written. The flow, rhyme and rhyme are impeccable! Well done!
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This really tear my heart, so ful of emotions so much unconditional love for your dad. I think hes smiling from above to see this dedication to him. And please remember people can never really die, they live on your heart forever till the day comes that you will be reunited again, and till that time you have to look up at the sky on nights when there are no clouds on the hevaen high above us. One of those many stars will sparkle special for you telling that he's still alive in your mind and will there be forever to support you in this life
Hugs Herman -
thank you
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Wow. THis touched me in a way I could never explain. I know how you feel, I'll say that much.
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omg im so sry about this. in a way this poem reminds me of last january when i lost my grandmother in a car accident so this christmas was so weird and really depressing cuz it all revolved around her if u get that well im reading more becuz ur poems invoke some of the feelings ive pushed away
Sarah -
Wow, this is really sad, but very well written. I wasn't expecting the ending to be what it was, I thought that maybe your dad had just left or something.
I'm sorry that you felt/feel those emotions.
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aww...this is so sad-brought tears to my eyes as i read it..i've lost someone before but i could not imagine losing my father-this is very insperational to all who have lost their fathers..aww..and it flows so well! awesome job-keep up the good work
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Oh wow this made me so incredibly sad. The thought of losing someone that way and of feeling this sad about them, which I can understand but it's so incredibly
This is the best one ive liked so far
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That's really good! I like it a lot!! You did a great job! It's sad and really good! Nice job! It really feels like you wrote this from the heart! Great job!!
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Now I think I liked this poem better than the last one on this subject.
In such a simple way, you captured how it feels to lose your parent...it indeed does make you feel like a little child. That was powerful in its simple way.
Your voice in this one was so sorrowful, it hurt me. This was a great poem.
~~Dawn
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Inspiring write, beautifully written and filled with such tender emotion, you can feel the child inside crying out desperately for her father. Incredibly powerful.
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wow, thank you so much for your comment. its a true story/poem, and i'm glad you liked it. cheers!
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i loved this poem. i actually am crying as i write this. im so sorry this happened to you. i know how it is to lose a loved one. this is a very sweet and emotional poem. i hope u make it throught the holiday seasons ok. oh shit, im getting my keyboard wet with tears. lol. well, excellent write. bravo.
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excellent
I love the different moods set through the stanzas. I really like how the girl is upset with her father, yet can come to forgive him. Forgivness is a treasure, and is not expressed enough. Nicely done. -
wow, i didnt have a clue which poem to start with theres so many...thats insane!!! well i remebred how you said you like your earlier poems for the contesty thingy so here i am..
OH my, that was a touching piece. i could feel your pain, to a certain degree.. it was a very good poem.. i liked how you expressed the different things you felt, how at the beginning it was a good feeling and by the end it was still a good feeling but, that little something was missing.. and it was very sad in a positive way...if that makes snese...i really like this poem, its very sad, but very nicely done...
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I'm so sorry you had to loose your father at such a young age... this was a very touching piece of poetry, and I have to admit, It's very beautifully written...
I hope everything is a little bit better for you now?
Leander -
This was very touching. Sad incrediably sad, but touching. You're a very good writer!
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Awww hunny this is so sad!I liked it a lot though.You put a lot of emotion into it.I'm sure it's hard to not have a dad mine never was around and well doesn't really care to be.I know things like this can hurt hopefully things are a little better and fading a bit.Anywayz on the poem other than the emotion it wasn't choppy it had a very nice flow and it was put together so perfectly.Wonderful write.
Hugs.
Mandi -
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, good contest! cheers!
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I loved this poem. Sorry you didn't win my contest but I did give u an honorable mention plus Im doing another contest about family and holidays . So please so enter this. It should be up in about 3 days. after the weekend
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ummmm...yes. My Dad died when I was four, and I wrote this in my journalsim class actually, when I was 15. We were supposed to write a letter to someone, mine ended up being a poem, and that's how I started writing poetry! Thank you for your comment and question!
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I have a question this was a great poem, but i was wondering is it true?
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Aww this is so sad I think you wrote this extremely well and this was a different take on the happy christmas story portrayed in many of the poems I have read so far Well done on this write and the best of luck in the contest
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Excellent
How beautiful all the sounds taste and feel of xmas love joy and peace but with the sadness thrown in -
awesome job! thats so sad....ive never expirieced that before...and it sounds very painful...i cant imagine....i love it! you put it to a childs view...very cute, sincere and innocent....beautiful work! good luck!
gem~chan -
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awwww omg! that's so sad. i feel really sorry for you for having lost a parent. but i really liked the poem, you expressed yourself really well. -
CHRISTMASMAGIC
The most beautiful time and also the sadest is Christmas..your poem made me sad but saw the joy you had as a child to still spin the Christmas magic in your words.One could feel the presence of a wonderful father beside you as you wrote this -
Thank you for your comment and encouragement, cheers!
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This was a wonderful poem for my contest...It captured missing a person that has past and the rhyming was very good..The style the meaning was pleasant to read...Losing a parent is one of the hardest things to go through in life and the holidays always bring back those memories that you had together but those memories keep them alive in our hearts. Thanks for entering!
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nicely done
this was beautiful. I am 60 and my dad died when I was 19 but I still remember him and miss him even after all these years. May the Lord bless you with beautiful memories of him and your time together.
Bonnie -
This is so sad. It's so hard to loose a dad. I work with children of divorce because I know the pain it brings them. Death is even harder. The holidays can especially be tough.
The poem itself is well written. Good memories. Has much feeling in it. -
excellent
This poem brought tears to my eyes...literally. What an awesome job you did writing from the heart. Your words broke my heart. -
what a great piece..sad but very well written...i felt it flowed very nicely and everything fitted well! goodluck in the contest!
later days
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aaaawwww.. this is sad ..it's so hard to lose a loved one..
I see great emotion in this write.. I lost my dad about 6yrs ago..It hurt even at age 39 and lost a child at birth..but in your poem u say yrs from now we will be together..I believe that is true..Love your write and god bless..this contest will be so hard to judge..Thank you for entering.. -
thank you very much. Actually, these poems are my most personal, and close to my heart. Thank you.
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Very hard for me to read. My dad died 8 years ago (I was just 15). However we never did anything. He was never really "there" anyhow. Except in the last 2 months or so. That's probably the worst thing, taken away when I just got to know him.
You should like your Dear Dad poems. For others, here they are.
http://allpoetry.com/Poem/635702 - Dear Dad
http://allpoetry.com/Poem/801894 - Dear Dad (Part 2 1/2)
http://allpoetry.com/Poem/693430 - Dear Dad part 3 -
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Thank you. This is actually my favorite poem of mine. It was the first one I ever wrote, and the one that inspired me to write. -
A very sad, but emotionally sweet verse.
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A beautiful sad write. Sometimes we look back on those fond memories and they can bring more tears than the sad times. A lovely write.
Thanks for entering
Natalia -
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I'm sorry you lost your dad.. I know what it feels like to lose a dad. I lost my stepdad not my dad but I know it's really hard. Its really great that you're looking ahead at being able to see him again. Great job! good luck in the contest~! -
That was so beautiful. It reminds me of my Christmas's with my dad. Until he passed away. Very very emotional. I really loved it.
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beautiful tribute to your father, your relationship and your family. how very fortunate to have a relationship such as this with any loved one.
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I'm so sorry for your loss, I know what it's like to lose someone close to your heart. You've certainly poured your emotions into this piece and it's a very touching write because of that. Take care, Heather x
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A very touching write, sorry you have lost your dad, your so young mine wasn't apart of my life much. Sometimes I think he tries to be my dad even in my 20s then it seems he doesn't....I just don't know what to feel anymore. This is a beautiful piece and im glad you have some memories to cherish.
Sherry
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yeah i can understand why it was your favourite!!! wow that was awesome!!!! i really did like it wasn't all sad bewus there was hope that ur gonna seehime and i know you're going to see him again! oh wow, that was really something special, ur dad would be proud of you
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So full of emotion! I think the verse
'But I know one day,
Years from now,
We'll be together,
Together somehow'
The comparison to yourself as a young child works really well too - I can relate to that feeling, I lost someone special too. -
You made my heart ache.....such beauty! ~Laura
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A very moving poem. A very good friend of mine lost her father a couple years ago and had to deal with the same kind of thing, so I kind of know what you're going through, on some level. A beautiful memoir to you father. Wonderful job.
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oh wow, thats very well written and its very sad. I cry every night for my dad, except my father hasn't died just yet, he'll go within a few years......anyways great poem!
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this is beautiful. im so sorry you lost your father, that has to be so difficult. very good for your first poem, keep up the good work sweetie
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