reminder ~
on the Other Side o'the world
the Sun shines on
Author notes
Jeremiah 31:35
John 1:5 & 8
Note : In reference to suggestions that capitalizations not be used in haiku, I wish to remind that Japanese uses sound symbol characters , not letters , for words. Therefore, apart from attempting an approximate equivalence in syllable length, any other constraints would be a non sequitur. Japanese has subtle variations to indicate double meanings, just as we use the capitalization of regular words in English poetry. (Capitals for proper nouns are also considered acceptable).
Written May 19th, 2004
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hehehe - been having fun with haiku of late lol - so may people who write 50 pages of words on 3 line poem
okay i will give my mad head one:
reminder ~
a good opening - it makes me smile with memory, we all have those little reminder sparkles in mind.
on the Other Side o'the world
spinning sunshine shows softly, sweet life, bright life.
the Sun shines on
and yeah the sun shines, i see into everywhere-nowhere and laugh life.
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This was so very pretty...the image is breathtaking!
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Wow! Liked that...umm...profound message in your lil presice hiaku, (trying to educate myself on form poetry, found your page an was intrigued)
t o know the truth that the "night" has meaning(sun shines on the other side) Nice!
Hope to read more ?
(<-----my parrot)
scars and stars,
PoeticPirateShip! -
wonderful observance.
The sunset.........is only an illusion. -
had a long haired cat named luna this reminded me of her thank you ♥ i do miss her so... and this poem as were her pale blue eyes is beautiful.
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Thank you!
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this was phenomibnal! i loved how much was put into such a beautifully short haiku! this was incredible xxx
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OUTSTANDING
hello poet..this is outstanding..great imagery with a good statement..I love the O'..WELL DONE HERE POET..great play on words..larry -
i love these simple observations haiku put into words. this is lovely. i was a bit surprised by the way you began this; the word reminder draws attention to the possibility of a new day. i really liked the simple message you bring forth - as much as it is common sense, not many stop to remember.
illusions -
Wow! That picture totally complements the haiku. Beautiful!
Lorena -
You are so welcome
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Thank you, Charishma! Appreciate your comment, glad you liked it.
~G
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Excellent!
Aha! This is brilliant quillwork. Excellent imagery here. You've made the whole world look so small and perfectly balanced with light and darkness{equally spread} on either part of the world with the sun and the moon. The sun, moon and our planet, Mother Earth, all seem so closely packed in this 'ku. I particularly like L1 in this write. This 'ku gives me the message that tomorrow is a new beginning. Tomorrow there will be a new morn, a new day will unfold and there will be new things{good} to look forward to. I really enjoyed this write. The accompanying picture made it even more pretty! Thank you for sharing.
Best Wishes,
Charishma -
This is really beautiful I love the image you created with this lovely write. I entered too and I wish you luck in the contest.
I love this
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Thank you, sweet soul!
Ever 'more', never 'less'. 
~ G 
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gorgeous
this is great reminder and a wonderful ku, gorgeous background and picture of the moon and waves, what a novel way of looking at night-time you have presented from the bible, keep on writing... keep on being... keep on making art... and never let your light burn out... pen -
This is beautiful...great presentation as well.
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I sure do love your haiku's! Please write more they're terrific! And the picture is sure lovely! Thank you for sending me these links, these are fabulous. If you have anymore please I'd be honored to read them!
K-la(Look I can spell my name like that! he he!
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Wow this was beautiful.
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wow. Who would have thought...
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comforting...
This is a beautiful image you have created, and a great picture you have chosen too. A great reminder too, as each person wakes up, there is someone else in the world falling asleep, thanx for giving me this image, and you are very welcome for the applause.
USpace
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Thank you for your kind comment and applause, Karen. Much appreciated.
~ G
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Very Good
You've obviously put a lot of thought into this haiku (which I noted from your author's comments.) Excellent work and actually quite thoughtful. I like the picture which accompanies it. Again, very well done. -
wow - Thank you for showing me how it's done - leading from the front!
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Thanks for entering.
Fifthdove -
I like this, was a bit uncertain about the use of the word reminder on its own at first, but after allowing the image to take over, I've grown to appreciate it.
This is a good piece with an original perspective to a common image, just as it should be.
Andrew -
Stunning You have the perfect haiku here. I wouldn't change a thing. Be proud of this one. It speaks volumes in an elegant manner while staying true to form.
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this is beautiful. funny, actually, i was just contemplating writing a haiku about the moon.... great minds think alike, i suppose.
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Thank you, kind sir Your comments are most appreciated.
~ G
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very good
A very thoughtful poem. No matter the situation you are in, it is temporary unless you decide to make it permanent. From browsing the comments I can see you have stirred the thoughts of many.
I enjoyed this.
John
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This is really a very nice haiku. I'll probably never be able to write these things. I'm just not that good at capturing one image that way. But you did very well and made a very strong message with this haiku. Thanks for sharing. zee
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Thank you Bill And the Sun shines on..and on.
~ G
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Excellent
Hi Gennelle:
Ma at kara has done a beautiful job of reminding us of what we cannot see and yet await for our own view. Excellent write as the moon shines on and gives us the reflection of what others see on the other side of the world. Thanks. Bill -
great job
this is meant to inspire and help creativity soar!! great haiku!! i really loved it!! you are such a talented person!! keep up the fantastic work!! this haiku really is thought provoking,that's why i respect it!! hugs poetic janis/~dani~
Edited on May 20, 10:05 p.m. because 'b'. -
AHH...even better now!!
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Loved it! It is a splendid poem!
My heart and mind live in two different continents, while the sun shines on one, the moon smiles to the other.
Mari
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good point
I love this, and it's an important thing to remember... Write on, because I will keep reading. Very nicely done. -
Fine write............
Don -
Perfect simplicity
Dearest G ~
Pure, simple truth - yet leading to complexity of meaning. I've read many versions of this topic, but yours top them all [my own: the Sun shines further; further than sea and sight: also in darkness]
Myra -
Gorgeous
This is a fabulous observation of physical and spiritual cosmology! Your writing conventions give you a wealth of meaning. In the night, the moon gives us proof the sun still shines, "thy Son will shine as he shines now and heretofor." (Donne)
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The Power Of Tomorrow!
Gennelle,
That is just beautiful! It says way more than the words show.
It resounds in my head! Bravo.
Tommy -
Thank you, Exit You read this before I put the background in...
~ Maatkara
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Maatkara,
hey...i love this...it gives me inspiration...wonderfully writen...much praise...great write
<3,
Exit
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