Did you feel me today?
When the wind kissed your neck
and sent shivers down your spine...
As I traipsed across your desert
and glided along your horizon...
did you?
As I lingered in the air
just above you,
did you feel my breath
as it breezed across your back?
Open your mouth
and taste my rain
as I come down on you...
feel me
Author notes
Silver in XShades0fwhitEX's contest allpoetry.com/Contest/619906
Written May 18th, 2004
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A contest entry
- 111 by XShades0fwhitEX.
500 points, ended January 23, 2004, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
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i would love to feel like that - your write feels so ghostly good. thanks for sharing.
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it's true...a woman has a way of almost possessing a man's senses some days. well, at least for me it's that way.
excellent poem! -
Damn what to say.
So that was you? I was bloody soaked to the skin by the time I got to work. Don't do it again
A beautiful write mate. Quite sensual -
You know, I'm suprised I won the challenge, I read this poem a few days ago when you entered it and I couldn't believe how beautiful it was... and I'd like to check out your stuff too...
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OH that was just AWESOME! Reminds me of something Romeo would say to Juliet....only not in Shakespear's style
A lovely poem! So beautiful! Just lovely images! Good luck!
peace and love
Susan
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This is magnifcent, it's about love, and I am in awe with how you worked with it. I adore it. Great write and good luck!
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Wow, i get an erotic feeling come off of the last few lines...lol i was kind of in shock hehe...jk...great job on this, and good luck in the contest...
take care
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Can't find the words to describe what I though about your poem so, to sum it up I'll revert to my standard line: I liked it it's good. I sometimes wish I could be the weather so I could be closer to the one's I love and mis
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this was very good, I like how you desribed yourself as the weather, ok that sounds kinda dorky, but this was really good, the way I think the poem is meant is like your dead, and you want your love to know your still there, like feel me ya know? ahhh i love it
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I like the way you described yourself as wind and rain, as traipsing across the desert of your lover's horizon... I see nothing wrong to comment about here... keep writing!
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im not sure what to think but i liked the poem! lol great work keep it up!
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Wow...I absolutely LOVE this!!! Love the last line - awesome!
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