The smoke in my eyes
simulating tears
never to fall again
as I burn your memory,
secretly in effigy.
I thought I could let you go,
but out of cowardice,
I throw myself upon the flames
extinguishing
your metaphoric pain.
Wanting to hold you dear
even in silent agony
at least the pain
is real,
even if your love
wasn't.
I'm so sorry..
Please don't go..
After all is left
unsaid,
and with no
definitive end
I'm still willing
to suffer,
in silence
as only a distant
friend.
Author notes
This just popped into my head, and I banged it out in a couple minutes. The words flowed so easily from my fingertips. It's about loving someone who has left so much, that you want to erase them from memory, but not being able to let them go, so instead you suffer the pain, and just want to stay their friend.
Written May 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- CONTEST: Giving up or Letting go. by StayWithMe.
333 points, ended June 5, 2004, 82 entries
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brilliant very descriptive i think again your word use and play in awesome. keeps me as a reader gripped.
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to suffer in silence...and written...to us, as friends..
another great write of pain, ache and loss...one day
it may be an ode to joy...but for now...your hurt is expressed
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very good write!! Its nice but sad at the same time. Very descriptive and emotional.
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OMG! i love this! its beautiful and so sad! Its sooo full of emotion! Such a great write doll! keep it up!
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aww..Ark.. this is great! I needed to read this poem , b/c at this moment I am feelin it more than ever, I thank you for this. Sometimes ideas do roll off fingertips and thier is no thinkin jsut writing, I love poems like that. I love the "burn your memory part" that is what most hartbrek nppl wish to do erase the ones they love from thier memory. I loved it!!
Much Loves
Kla -
i can totally understnad this and im going through it right now. this is an awesome poem..it has a great flow and just nice job! thank you for entering and good luck!
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thy words touch within a sadness
that holws within that silence
where echoes scream utterly in the wind!
You have me thinking my friend!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
Edited on May 21 because ''. -
speaks to me!!
great poem,i really enjoyed it!! you did an excellent job expressing such feelings!! the best poetry comes from quick thinking and no planning!! keep up the fine work,you impress me yet again,hugs poetic janis/dani -
great
very good poem. i liked the bit about loving even though she didnt, great. keep up the good work. Bowie of the knife and sword. -
oh my gods... this is beautiful... totally beautiful and extremely well done. Bravo hun!
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Beautiful and dark...
~Liadan -
This is flowing with emotion. awesome flow
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"at least the pain is real" Oh I love that line. It's repeating over and over in my head. Pain lets us know we are alive, I'd think a kiss would be more pleasant. nice write.
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awwww, this is great i love this write... at first i thought it was about weed, lol... of course thats what i would think.... awsome write!!
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