pure and absence of my soul I sit still and watch
watching the carefree people so joyous, and me?
cast upon the stalk of death
endless pain of torturous mind
tears of blood
and pain so deep, numb to the touch
the emptiness inside is almost like hell
endless pain and endless tears
It only comes out as a whisper as I scream and yell
I'm all alone, I'm all alone never to find myself inside
for sorrow dread tears bring fourth a flood
bringing me here, distant to see
I'm standing in the doorway
limbs broken and I can't seem to step out
The exit signs flashing blood red
you can see the emptiness inside of me
I've been crying out forever
I've been doing my best
but this now becomes my never
I'll die just like the rest
With this broken spirit, body, mind, and heart
Sorrow now becomes within, sorrow never to part
Now I know it is time
I'm gonna end it all
I don't give a damn about this rhyme
I'm tired of Taking these falls
regardless of what I've said, not words nor poetry can share
The true pain I feel inside
The withering and pleading for someone to care
so I turn, my friend, I turn to thee, my suicide
Author notes
um...I don't like this poem, I don't think I'll win but, its worth a shot right?
Written May 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- Show Me Your Shadow by RedRibbons.
300 points, ended May 30, 2004, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thankyou for the comment and the applause, and for pointing out that error, I actually wrote the poem "on the spot" kinda thing, and thats why its so expressive and loose I guess you could say, thanks again
~Sandra -
I think you express your pain vividly in this poem. There is one spelling error you missed..."casted upon the stalk of death"... Cast is both present and past.
I like the way your poem flows, totally freewritten and boundless. A great way to emphasize the extremes of sorrow you feel.
~Bezoar -
wow thank you, didn't think it was that good, but thanks ^_^ oh and I fixed the spelling errors, thanks for pointing that out
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damn i am impressed being the first to enter my contest i think this is the first best some spelling mistakes go back and fix that! but my god... i love it... ~Celia~
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