I dream angel and the eternal questions
In dog years through owners and collars
Cheap wine and loose women; figments
of some idea's imagination from Calumet
puffs and war -- upon horses freed to run.
I dream angel for the children of a lesser God
Bigger for living without legs or beauty or love
My faith sings through the night like a hunting -
- owl; ancient, silent, wise on wing, talon, sight
but blind I am to the pulse of my maker.
I dream angel for he that eludes me with flash
and tempest, tragedy. My brother fire will never
not dance -- will never not eat at the chance to
spread. My sister the foam and the wave, yes, the
Sea, so big as to forget me, and her own creation.
I dream angel for you that watches me fight chaos
Marduk the Tiamet. You loved me as a boy
and fed me at the lake my lady sweet lady with
hands like a warm statue you gave me my sword
You gave me my dream, said, "Angel... Awake."
I dream angel, have purpose, teach the words
in magic symbols crowned hyacinth I dream
many things, then those dreams begin to dream.
I dream angel, heart, blood, feather
But will dreams really make things better.
Author notes
Written May 18th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Desire-Inspired by Veil of Winter.
325 points, ended October 24, 2005, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Oh, wow. Very well-written. I especially liked how you compared your faith to an owl. Great job, thanks for entering!
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Very nice write. I definitely liked it, though I kind of question its relevence. It was explanatory I think, put in its own way. Nice job. The flow was pretty smooth for the most part, and you didn't have any annoying rhymes. Great job, good luck.
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i really liked this, from the first i dream angel i wondered if angel was a women and that was a pet name, but then it could also be siritual as well either way i did really enjoy this one
keep writing you have amazing talent thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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This is awesome, good work LaLa
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Amazing and profound. I loved it although it is difficult to understand.
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good emotional work long with a good use of words. reminds me of these two girls i know but i wont get into that wicked non the less
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aw that's so sweet horus... did you make that for me? I"m kidding... this is beautiful... I love just...wow, you use your words so well... makes it impact deeply into my brain, just... bravo
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what an amazing combination of words, ideas, and images!
this seems effortlessly written, a facilely written piece that translates the language of beauty to us. i loved it.
elizabeth -
Hey I quite didnt understand this poem yet it struck me with that it was from your soul...
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I too love the heavy carpet mooses.
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I have never thought of myself as looking to be big, more of a voyeur, and a listener really, and that translates well into poetry.
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william hurt and marley matlin, great peace, this reminds me of dreams lost shattered from some deep denial of something, it is funny how we go thru life being deaf and dumb and bling to the world, and when we think we are making progress or getting what we want, something seems to make us fall, intresting it is like wanting to be rich and famous and someone saying you do have what it takes, I know how that is...
But in all it was beautifully written, your words I feel them, you have a great talent and I see big things for you, just don't let it go to your head, take time to smell the coffee, or when driving, to look out the window and see how pretty the flowers have bloomed from last months rain, drive by the ocean and listen to the waves, they speak
~Rhiannon~
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reminds me. of one of my FAAAAAAAAAAAVORITE songs ..by the tea party. 8twitch*
the description in this is priceless, touching, and full of grace.
you write with such ease (or at least, appear to) this is beautiful.
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///As always, your writing goes beyond the description spectacular. This poem was breathtaking.. if i had 20 thumbs they'd all be up.. you bet your boots 2 are!!! nice work! i can't WAIT to read more!!!!
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classic.
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I dreamed I would read some good poetry, thank god for those fucking angels. This is great
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wicked use of words real good.
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