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I Saw A White Squirrel Today

by Gregg Rowe


I saw a white squirrel today

I also saw

men on Rollerblades
adolescents on skateboards

a family pushing
a baby carriage

a film being turned

a goldfish

a lilac blooming

a car accident

a double rainbow

I saw a white squirrel today


I also saw a white hair

Author notes


Written May 22nd, 2002

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  • abdulrahman
    October 2, 2004
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    I like this one a lot. It seems sad somehow, but happy too. Like photographs. Making memories. You're have never read or written anything like this before. A great change from the ordinary.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    June 2, 2004
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    Hello there Evy Welcome to my weird world and you are so correct, it was an accident. It just came out one night nad I just left it...haven<t decided if it is finished yet, that is still festering in my mind...but poetry is never finished, it's art that is always worth evolving. Gregg

  • Napkin
    June 2, 2004
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    Well this certianly was abstract! I have never read or written anything like this before. A great change from the ordinary. Unfortunatly I have tried many weird forms or weird ideas in my poetry and not all of them have turned out very good. At all. Anyway back to you. I found this poem read better outloud than in my head. This would be a wicked slam or read out in a creative writing class but of course your like a 30 something poem vetren so I don't know if you had done this intentionally or by accident. Most of my poems are accidents so I can't put my mind in that kind of set. Pushing all my fillers and opinons to the side I find myself with a very strange and very sketchy poem that will stay with my for a while.
    By and By
    Evy


  • DragonessTawnya
    May 19, 2004
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    White hair is a sign of wisdom, or so someone told me once. (shrugs) Oh well, I still dye my hair and cover it up when I find it. I like this one a lot. It seems sad somehow, but happy too. Like photographs. Making memories. You're amazing.
    ~Tawnya~


  • May 19, 2004
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    Funny the things we notice, when we actually take the time to look, funnier the things we miss everyday, because we don't take the time ..funny sad... you know.

  • listen
    May 19, 2004
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    hmm,so you're a watcher.great way to get inspiration to write.something i should try.i haven't written anything decent in a long time.creative.ttul


  • M.A.King
    May 18, 2004
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    captivating. the simple beauty that passes before us each day that goes unappreciated, not noticed. the artwork outside of our windows put into view with your words. and oh my God what would i give to see a white squirrel! i have never seen one and did not even know they existed. i am ashamed to say that since i am such an animal lover and squirrel watcher. wonderful writing as always.


  • Clyde1023
    May 18, 2004
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    hmmm...somewhat odd i must say gregg...lol, i saw a brown squirral, but i don't think it's the same, damn those white hairs!!!white hairs bring dignity.
    love ya boi,
    caity


  • astralshepherd gold member
    May 18, 2004
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    i bet you earned that white hair
    you amaze me, Gregg...no, astound is better.
    ~richard

  • RoughRider
    May 18, 2004
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    Excellent

    This is great, gave me a smile at the end of it! Assuming you meant a gray hair. Like always i enjoy reading your writes.
    Thank you my friend


  • angelica silver member
    May 18, 2004
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    Great poem Gregg, I can just see you sitting at your window or in a park watching life go on around you, enjoyed it my friend~I gather the white hair was yours~Bob had black hair now it's a silvery white, it looks very distinguished.lovesya~Joan
    Edited on May 18, 8:42 because ''.

  • bowie
    May 18, 2004
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    good

    it sounds like a nice poem. im not sure i really get it, but thats ok. its still a nice poem. keep up the good work.


  • May 18, 2004
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    scary, a white hair! AAAAH! i hope you find peace with that.


  • candy177
    May 18, 2004
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    You know, I've never seen a while squirrel. Interesting and odd, but I can just imagine sitting on a park bench and seeing all of this pass me by! Great job Gregg!


  • S A Adelmann
    May 18, 2004
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    White squirrels are odd anywhere. I kinda got the scenes passing by in the course of a day thing that yopu were going for...but it all felt kinda empty.

    Scott


  • Blue moon
    May 18, 2004
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    Hi there,
    I feel that this was a very interesting read, however I agree I feel taht this was quite odd. Anyway great write well done. You are very luck to have seen a white squirrel. Please keep it up.

    Blue moon

  • lordoftherings gold member
    May 17, 2004
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    I guess the best way to explain this is to think of snippets of life as you watch it pass you by, also in Québec, white squirrels are rare, and I just happened to have seen one that day so I just recorded everything else I saw.
    Edited on May 18, 1:08 because ''.


  • Aerona
    May 17, 2004
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    odd...very odd but kind of interesting poem...not sure what else to say but the fact that it is quite odd

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