A warm golden sunrise,
That cast dark shadows
Makes room for the morning light
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Written April 23rd, 2002
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Greatr work. I really liked this Haiku my friend. I am still learning how to write them correctly. I think sonnets are alot easier than these haiku's.
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I enjoyed the last line a lot, very sweet and simple and straight to the point. Perfect for a Haiku!
Oh by the way YOU'VE BEEN HOODWINKED!!!
~M~
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You made the sky beautiful with this haiku the form and sensation of the imagery is an excellent team work for this one just beautiful. I enjoyed reading this one.
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Beautiful...just beautiful...I like the imagery you have created a wonderful painting of the sunrise within your words.
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This has 18 syllables {5-5-8} and hence, it is not haiku as it has crossed 17 syllables. Moreoever, I felt this was rather reading like a long sentence. May I suggest that you knock off the "A" of L1 and then you will have 17 syllables in this.
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loved this!!! simple things like haikus can really touch someone, i love this. it gives me a good feeling, like...maybe no matter how dark things may seem there's always room for the light...it gives a person a great feeling, and i need that now more than ever!
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This is a vivid description of a sunrise. It might best fit in the nature catagory. I think it is a great poem describing an occurance of nature.
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The sunrise is just moments away here. My daughter woke up (shes one) and ate and went back to sleep but I wanted to stay up and watch it rise.
Beautiful haiku
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very pretty. like it lots.
love
gbird
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Glorious morning light.
My collection entitled: Shiloh is written to and for my Father. This poem of yours reminds me of the first morning right after the night of his suicide when I was 13 years old. It was the first time in my life that I had actually been up all night in despair and then to see a sunrise. And sure enough like your poem it did bring dark shadows. But at the same time it did as well bring room for the light. This is a very beautiful poem and expresses now what I could not begin to understand at the time.
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excellent
very well done. i have always found haikus difficult and easy at the same time, mainly because of their length (or lack thereof). On the one hand, I tend to find it difficult to compress an idea into so few lines, but on the other hand, it makes it easier to write many poems much more quickly. only one comment-isn't it "that castS dark shadows" instead of 'cast'? I know you didn't ask for a critical review, but it seems such a minor and easy to fix thing that i though i would mention it. all in all, however, excellent work. -
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wow, great imagery! it made me feel warm
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lovely!!
thanx for sharing
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don't touch it!
vivid colors surround!!!! -
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Nicely done. Love watching the sunrise from my back porch. Did that just this morning.
Madeline -
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oooo nice haiku, great work... -
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i have sat an watch sunsets an sunrise's all by my self.
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Thanks Andrew i am new at Haiku so i don't really know (LOL)
Blessings Susan -
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That's better. :-)
I love this, but is it an inverted haiku,(isn't a haiku surpose to be 5-7-5 ?)
but I still enjoyed the read. Andrew -
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Haven't had the sun rise yet???
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