Too many thoughts
fly through my head.
too much time,
wishing i was dead.
What do i do
with all this in my mind?
i've lost my way,
it's myself i can't find.
I'm can't stand this,
i'm going insane.
the images zip by,
and i can't take the pain.
i can't sleep.
i can't think.
i can't live.
i'm on the brink.
I need to escape,
and leave it all.
i need to be freed,
freed from the fall.
So i sit here,
in the dark of my room.
it's so quiet,
as is a mother's womb.
Awake i am,
drifting away from reality.
what can i do,
with my destroyed mentality?
It's all falling,
falling away from me.
that's the way the song goes,
that's the way it will be.
somebody stop and help me,
i can't go on.
i'll be awake,
till early dawn.
This story won't end.
i'll lie here alone.
i have been beaten.
the demons have won.
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Written May 15th, 2004
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very well done. The tone in it was so good that it felt like being swept downstream in a river with nothing to stop it & nothing to grab on to...good job!
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Awesome
Wow. Really good write. Feelings swirled and all. Very well written
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excuse the french but, that fuckin rocked! sooo many emotions! it was so deep! i loved it. it was "freakin awesome"! I dont know what to think, i'm still in shock of how well written it is.
Those feelings in the poem i can relate to. they were well said and captured. wow. good job. -
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Wow..I felt your pain hardcore. What is the world coming
to?..It seems like only 1 out of every 1,000 people is actually
happy with their life. Sadness rules the world.
I like the flow of this and the way you worded everything.
Unfortunently, that is the way the song goes..
Well, obviously, you've got tons of people who care about
you, so you dont need my help
hehe. Write on with ya
bad self. Keep letting those feelings out
twizted bizkit -
this is kinda creepy, sounds like something i would write. dont turn into a dark depressing person, its not worth it, ive been there and i still am. the poem was good, but dont turn. well i guess u have enough offers from people, but if u need any advice, im here.
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I realized that everyone else said stuff like "if you need to talk, call me", hmmm . . . I guess I am heartless after all.
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It's about time you've written something new, all though, I'm upset that it had to be so filled with pain...as a couple people have already said, if you need someone to talk to I'm here, just give me a call. Peace and Love,
Amazing write, powerful!
Leah -
I am gonna echo the above statement, Holy Shit. This is a good write but if you need to talk you can call me, i will email me cell number to you.
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Wowzers babe. I really like this. You might not but I do. Hey you know Im here for you 24/7 except when I get 3000 calls and turn my phone off *sorry*
Jen -
Two words: holy shit
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