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Gooey, glowing bright blue light
Hot and sticky, messy white
Shiny silver lumps of lead
Long green cords with sparkles red.

What was once green is now quite clear
A magic space will now appear
The bright blue light can now be seen
Completed project so pristine




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Written May 15th, 2004

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  • sanity
    May 20, 2005
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    This could be anything from scientific to spiritual and everyone will look at it differently........I miss your poetry my friend, be nice to hear from you again............Stay well and be happy in all you do
    Hugs and love
    LindaXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXx


  • Ember Rose
    September 26, 2004
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    I agree with pozo. Really liked the imagery in this. Makes one think and had a sing-song kinda quality to it. Saw that you haven't been here since August. Hope you come back to post some new pieces. Rose

  • pozo
    August 9, 2004
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    This is an interesting poem with great ambiguity, I liked it a lot Great description and well written, naturally rhyming poem. Keep up the good work

  • mademoiselle
    May 31, 2004
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    is that a glow stick? were you licking toads again no breath? i didn't think you were into the raver thing lol
    na just kidding well done dude can you read caramel strawberries i wanna know what you think

    cheers lovie
    mademoiselle x o x o

  • poltroon
    May 18, 2004
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    i like this... it could be talking about anything!

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