"I can't stand those freshmen," she'd cry out to us
She'd rant and she'd rave with a look of disgust
She was loud and outspoken, and grouchy and rude
She had one to match, when it came to our attitudes
She was a torrent of anger, a cyclone of growls
A thundering menace of shouts and of howls
Some students hated her, but others like me
Got to know this great woman with a passion to teach
She encouraged all who wanted to learn
Sat us down at computers (we each got our turn)
She let us write poems, to send in the mail
She even stamped and addressed them, and soon time would tell
We'd open the papers, to search and to find
Our poems, our stories, and time after time
She'd clip them and post them for all to see
I don't know about others, but it meant worlds to me
It was fun and exciting to be in her class
Even when she was cranky and glaring and crass
She could be mean, without a doubt
But those who disliked her quite simply missed out
Yes, she was tired of cheaters, of fools
Whose dogs ate their homework each day after school
She was sick of the bullies, the mockers, the cliques
She wanted to reach us, to teach all of us kids
She was older and wiser, much smarter and she
Had so much to give, and so much to teach
A genuine student her heart loved to find
And under the surface brimmed a soul good and kind
Yes,
She was my favorite
Author notes
Written May 14th, 2004
A contest entry
- teacher, teacher, I declare ...... (Contest for new members in May) by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 2, 2004, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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As always, its a joyful moment to read your writes. This one did seem to have some rhyming difficulties, but flaws are what make writes unique. I loved the meter it had, it really just made me read faster and faster. I loved it!
I'mma keep going!
Jessica
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Oddly enough, I'd be embarrassed to show it to her. Haven't seen her in years anyhow, and I'm positive that she's retired at this point. But she was a great teacher, one of the best.
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I love the way the rhyme and metre in this piece flowed. You also managed to rhyme it without simplifying the complexity of your phrasing- and as such managed to conjure up a vivid image of this teacher.
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Well, I love it. I enjoyed reading it and am going to allow some poetic license and forgive the oh so slight form errors.
Well done, good luck in the contest, Dave.
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Beautiful poem, but I agree with CookieZeal on the form part.
I wish my English teacher was like this when we were forced to learn poetry....I say forced, because she made it a miserable experience, and made me hate poetry for a long time. Had I had a teacher who loved the genre, then it might have been different.
Welcome to Allpoetry and good luck with the contest
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I like how you began it with the opposing views of others, and with wisdom construed it into the person she was REALLY trying to be for others.
_Content_- very GOOD!
Form_- Outside of the rhythm being slightly off, and a few of the words which changed every other stanza, it was a good poem for the most part!
Thank you for sharing and I'm glad you've come to AllPoetry! Warmly, CookieZeal
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wonderful way to describe how much this teacher touched you. You saw her for who she truly was. This was a joy to read, thanks for entering.
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You speak well of your favourite Teacher - she sounds very special. It could do with a little tweaking on the ehyme but overall it's a grand entry and thank you for participating in our challenge.
Good Luck
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Wonderfully done. This sounds a bit like one of my english teachers actually. ^^
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Beautiful, what a tribute. You were so articulate, and direct. The piece read very smooth and was enjoyable to read. You have great talent, insight and wit.
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This is a great piece however the rhyming is off in places and spoils it slightly for me. The flow would have benefitted from regular rhymes too I feel, but on the whole this was lovely.
Good luck and thanks for entering
Hayley
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