by Gregg Rowe
Dawn creeps silently
Into the opaque silence of my night
Chasing away shadows
Of the evening
I am restless:
Tossing and turning for hours
Between the cool sheets
That touch my soft skin
As I recapture the illusions
Of the dream that held me captive
I bask in the memory
Of our 501
CK brief encounter
Of last night
In the summer park
I toss my head
Against my pillow
Waking up
Staring at my blank ceiling
I see you everywhere
Even when you are not near me
And especially in my dreams
Amongst the many dark shadows
That slither through the park
I close my eyes again
Shutting out the warm rays
Of the morning sun,
Trying to sleep between the cool sheets
With their warmth
But
It should be your warmth
I see you again
Standing against the gigantic tree
Overshadowed by the moonlight
No shirt
501 jeans
And blond-tousled hair
My body reacts:
The warmth tingles in my thighs
And my uncircumcised cock
Starts to peek out
From its hold
Straining against my CK briefs
My desire mounts
I turn over on my stomach
Pressing my hardness into my mattress
Using all my early morning strength
Pushing
Thinking of you,
But cannot climax
I smile at this plight
Want to fall back asleep
To avoid the day's activities
With a constant hard on
But I must get up
I close my eyes again
To catch a fragmented photograph glimpse of you
One final time
Standing in the moonlight
With your jeans unbuttoned
And your manhood
Being stroked
By your gigantic hand
Fingers wrapped around pink flesh
Teasing me
As the sun penetrates my room
Forcing me to open my eyes
Raping my dream
The black night has been erased
The grey dawn becomes a sea of blues
My full splendours of a summer morning
Calls for me to join
In nature's celebrations
I flip over on my back
I smile that I am alive
I feel my strength harden
My passion mounting
Remembering you
Of a CK brief encounter
I smell the Polo of your skin
Close my eyes in reflection
Imagine you spraying
On the cologne
Your biceps bulging
And quivering pecks
With your every movement
Of preparation to go out cruising
Watching your narcissist self
In your mirror
I see you slip
Into your CK briefs
That hides your manhood
Into a bulge
Slide into your 501s
Tucking in that massive bulge
I respond
By spitting my hand
And sliding my meat
Between my palm
I see you tuck your belt
Through the loops of your jeans
Lucky that I was the one
To undo it in the moonlight
The buckle clenched between my teeth
Tugging and pulling at it
As you pumped your manhood
In your fist
My hand quickens
With these memories
And I run my other palm
Over my nipples
And feel them harden
Like my manhood
I release you:
Your jeans and briefs
To your ankles
Taste the salt between your thighs
As I flick my tongue
Over your warm, soft hairless balls
Finally
Engulf you
As I feel your heated skin
Your underside of your shaft
Riding my tongue
You toss your head back
Against the gigantic tree
The moonlight casts
An angelic light upon you
As you shoot your warm milk
Down my throat
The head erupting
Like a volcano
My hand quickens its pace
As I shoot my load
Hitting my face with its first release
The rest spews over my shaven chest
Against my hardened nipples
I rub the warm juice
Into my soft skin
I lick my fingers off
Tasting my sweet cum
On the tip of my tongue
Dawn creeps silently
Into the opaque silence of my night
Chasing away shadows
Of the evening
The black night has been erased
The grey dawn becomes a sea of blues
My full splendours of a summer morning
Calls me to join
In nature's celebrations
Author notes
Written May 14th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Look Good Naked by vaguelyfamiliar.
600 points, ended December 21, 2005, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I really dislike the last stanza. At first, I thought I also disliked the repetition, but after a few reads it really grew on me. I think it works well, especially in terms of how one approaches memories and the effects that they have... that overwhelming on-repeat sort of feeling where the details just shine (CK briefs, 501 jeans, belt loops) and it seems that the reality of the moment was lost with the moment.
At first, I thought I should hate this, but really, truly, I quite like it. I don't even know if I would consider this erotica, as it tells such a human story under all the sex (which is also only so human) which is so realistically and unromantically portrayed. The reactions are human.
Although the italics are what I interpret to be your memory... they feel too wordy and overthetop. The last stanza especially doesn't strike me as a particularly powerful place to end the piece.
Still, overall I really enjoyed this. It's sexual while maintaining it's humanity (no, not morality... humanity)
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awesome, simply awesome, I couldn't help but feel there, when this took place, so much excitement and fun, very very good write. -
O.K. Way out of my zone. You are definately talented with the written word, dude. i am somewhat of a redneck I guess. I just don't understand it..the whole gay thing. But I am *really* trying to expand my horizons and be "tolerant" I guess. this website has helped immensley. While I don't think anyone should should judge others for their feelings, I also don't believe anyone should judge others for their disagreements. Peace Bro! VC
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'My Awakening' is not always referred to in poetry as Biblical, depending on the reference used. In this case, it is based on Kate Chopin's "Awakening' and her discovery of sexuality, and William Hunt's 1853 Oil Painting ,The Awakening Conscience' both which are equally represented in literature as the Bible's Awakening. It is also unfortunate that 'Adult' and 'Erotica are not present in the Feature Box to prevent these sort of errors in selecting a poem to read.
Of course I respect your beliefs, as you respect mine. It is a two-way communication that is happening here. And within those beliefs we have structured ourselves on to the levels in which we choose to enlighten ourselves.
As always, Gregg 
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As courtesy, I clicked. But because I go by the biblical references, I don't partake. It's the place where my finial and divine love for the person gets separated from the person. You are familiar, I'm sure.
In tenderness, I relate that to you. Weren't for dignity of the spirit, we'd have nothing but pathos and rainbows out of the prism's proximity. Hope you respect me for that.
You are no less loved.
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Gregg, you are an awe-inspiring poet with so many different perspectives on life, i admire your skill, your diversity and your ability to evoke emotion in your work. Like a well worn beach pebble, abraded by many storms, your work has a smooth polished feel to it. I am the one who is honored. To be able to let you know your work is indeed meritorious is my pleasure as your work is my treasure. May you write with the fervor and joy God has graced you with for many many more years. ~richard
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Richard: I look forward to every comment that you pen on my works...I am not trying to convert anyone, nor am I writing to shock...I believe that a reader who has an open mind would accept the piece of writing for it's face value of what was penned and leave their inhibitions at the door when venturing to read my works. As always, you see the artistry of my work the way I intentionally penned it and that I thank you for...it gives me pleasure in that you do not chastise me for the subject matter of the work, but read it for its literary merits and as a writer that is all that I can ask. Thank you for this support and giving me the encouragement to continue to spin these tails that are so meaningful to me in my life. Just...thank you. Gregg
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This truly a well written and well crafted poem. A little too steamy for me.
is it hot in here, or is it you?
as far as content goes, but all that aside, it is a poem that really
occupies the mind with erotic images and, as the contest requires,
in a positive light. I think i split a gut when i read “501 CK brief encounter” , brilliant, simply brilliant. This almost had a “screenplay” feel to
it as i followed from scene to scene. Sometimes i see pictures added to poems to enhance e the appeal, to persuade the audience of the content. All the internal images were, for me, enough to carry the poem over the top and beyond. Thanks for an amazing perspective of “The Awakening” . From any other writer i may have dismissed this poem but you have a way of including your audience, letting them in and become as involved as you were when writing it. Thank you for posting it and allowing me the honor of commenting on it. Blessings to you and best wishes, I hope you do well in the contest. ~richard
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hmmm. and now the opinion from the hetero...well, hmmm. i'm not really sure what i can say. before you got specific it was a stright up lusty goodness piece, but i can't really comment on the rest.....nicely written though.
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wow. i was rock hard this entire poem. lol. GREAT WRITE! it's the only other gay erotica Ive read counting mine. It's very hot and very passionate, too.
Great write and good luck!
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well,i'm a lesbian,so this was a bit much to swallow.lol*winks*but as an erotica love poem,the passion and exchange of equal love for one another is awesome.if i remove myself from the fact that i am a lesbian,i can relate to this somewhat.good luck in the contest.ttul
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Golly this made me blush and I don’t blush easily. I thought I was good at describing sex…dayum…yea I need a smoke too…and I don’t smoke…what I really wanna do is go get my man and service him…yup ummm hmmm….
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Excellent
WOW, time to have a smoke. Excellent write my friend. Best of luck in the contest, well you don't need it!!
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I don't need VIAGRA when I write like this.
There are many more in my library like this if you are interested under Homo-eroticism, but I don't do to bad with the hetro-eroticism ones either. 
Gregg
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oh my....i am entranced and loving it..
oh my goodness...this is soo wonderfull..such descriptiveness and delailed..just peachy...i love reading this kind of stuff..I find two guys doing it more sexy and romantic and stimulating than a girl and a guy doing it..strange i know..but this piece is just wonderful..and so long..it kept me engulfed in it till the end..I think i may print it out and keep it with me forever...tis just perfect...keep it up...*and hard* sorry had to sya that...
heather
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