Tell me, is anything immortal?
Not the rocks or the sea,
not you and not me
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Tell me, tell me,
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Tell me why the seagulls cry
tell me why you had to die...
why?
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I miss you.
Author notes
I love and miss you...
Kyle Simpson, nine years. [leukimia]
Camren Cooper, twelve years. [cancer]
Dan, fifteen years [cancer]
Tiffany Phillips, fourteen years [car crash]
Lisa Edwards, fourties [cancer]
Ashley Brown, eleven years [plane crash]
Cory Simpson, fifteen years [OD, accidental]
Nathan Gale, twenty-five years [Shot by police]
El Mathes, sixties [heart attack]
Corey Hoehn [cancer]
Mike Cox [Car accident]
Written May 13th, 2004
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Tearz tearz. I loved this poem and your authur comments. I really loved the message this poem brings. Great job and good luck in the contest. And may all your friends R.I.P.
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Wow this was such a powerful and emotional write, I'm sorry tah tyou've lost so many people in your life. I like how this wasn't the typical love poem, it was deeper than that. Lovely job and thank you for entering
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Such a lovely tribute.I have lost many friends,especially over the last year,so I can really relate to this.Not a day goes by that I don't think about the.Well written and flows really well.Thanks for entering my contest!
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The story about the Sea Gull:
The Sea Gull was a God and was always flying through the sky, singing about the joys of life and love. One day, he met Ezhno ("He Who Walks Alone") in the woods and decided to play a trick on him. The Sea Gull knew that Ezhno loved Istas ("Cold as Snow") but was too shy to talk to her. The Sea Gull, being a God, was able to turn into Istas's likeness. Approaching Ezhno, the Sea Gull pretended to tell Ezhno that he loved him. Ezhno also confessed his love, and the Sea Gull turned back into a bird and started laughing at him. In Ezhno's anger, he cursed the Sea Gull so that it would never know love or happiness again. The Sea Gull, still laughing at Ezhno, flew away but could no longer find joy in flying. He decided to fly to the village, but noticed then that the people were starving. He flew over the plains and saw a girl being raped by a man. Further on, there was a giant war between two tribes. The Sea Gull realized that Ezhno's curse was not just a fake; he couldn't find one happy thing left in the world. The Sea Gull then flew far away and confined himself to the sea and the beaches spent the rest of his days crying and awaiting the end. -
Heh...I don't exactly have the strongest spiritual faith. It's more a matter of opinion, I guess. The idea of an eternal life after death is comforting but...I find it very difficult to believe in religion. I've grown up around church, I read the Bible, I pray...it just doesn't help me.
Thanks for the comment!
Annii -
Who's really remembered when they die? Sure, you might be in a history book or in a magazine or something but that's not really you...It's just what people think of you or one event that happened in your life that someone thinks is important.
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And if I'm gone before you are,
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Goodbye.
I love that. This is so touching, especially with the list of people. I dont want to comment with anything more than: this is wonderful. I think everyone has these feeling. But I don't think this is it. There is eternal life waiting for us.
pinkxxx
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Not a bad poem, with a nice rhyme pattern to it.
You only die if you're no longer remembered.
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This I liked very much except the ending it went out of flow as if you were in a hurry to finish it, the first part is great, sorry but that is how I feel, for what it is worth, would like to see this poem a tiny bit longer, hugs Di
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There's nothing immortal, and about your question "why people have to die" no one can answer it, we don't even know why we are here, and why we have to die.
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this is definitely a great poem, so short but so meaningful, im sorry all those freinds died, nicely written
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I think your opening stanza is very strong in this. I also felt like you sorta didn't know how to finish the final stanza. It loses some of the amazing quality the first stanza had.
Mary -
omg wowowowowowowowow is all i can say
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heh, I'll be turning 15 in a couple months. I'll be sure to check out your poem as soon as I can, and thanks for the comment.
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Don't forget to remember !!!
Dear Arianna,
I don't think that at 18 I knew anyone who had died!
Now I know a lot, and I guess we feel the same in some ways.
But if those were friends or family they can still live, in and through you and I. Memory is an extraordinarily powerful
thing. And a treasured thing too! Why do we all become concerned when, say, a senior family member begins to forget things? I think we know that it is somewhat magical, or mystical if you will. So remember, and make room for their memories in your life. So many of us forget too soon, and where does that leave them?
I wrote a poem abouta Seagull too should you like to read it.
allpoetry.com/Poem/702425
I hope you like it. Keep your chin up kiddo!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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This is a very insightful poem. I think it is ironic that you use a series of questions as the body of your work. Your theme of acceptance is evidenced in your final lines "And if I'm gone before you are, goodbye". This write is courageous and uplifting in the face of the uncertainty we all share. You did a marvelous job on this! Great write! Thanks for featuring this.
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An interesting and cleaver poem – but I find the Authors comments far more riveting – what a sad epilogue – Albert.
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this is a very beautiful poem. it was the title that drew me in. i like how this was a tribute to lost friends, a very touching gesture. i liked the simplicity of this poem that showed your emotions very artistically. anywho, awesome write, so keep writing, and have anice day!!!!!
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This is a very good write.. it's so emotional.. I love it.. it's so sad.. so longing for.. something smiles I love it.. it's so sadly beautiful..
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excellent
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A simple yet striking piece. It captured a snapshot of despair with the question 'why?' so naturally. Good write.
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yeah...it's rather my fault it's so short. I wrote it a long time ago for a friend and then they went and died on me...I haven't felt like expanding it and I wrote it when I was ten-ish...
The sea gull is a story from my great-grandmother. Basically, the sea gull once was a god/immortal and would always sing songs about the happiness of life/love/joy. Then he pissed off the Indian equivalent of the devil and the devil stole his innocence and he grew up and saw people starving, a girl being raped, a giant war, ect. He forgot the happy things in life and flew over the seas for all eternity, singing about the sadness of life.
I hope that helps...
-ari
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Very sad. It's touching and I'm sorry about the friends you've lost. Hopefully you can find solace in something.
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this is a weird poem, lol, i liked the way it was written and i like the style, the flow of it was very natural
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Great!
Beautiful write. I love it! It was short and to the point. The emotions flowed out beautifully along with your use of words. I'm sorry about your friends that have passed away, I've had many as well. Great write! Keep it up! <3 Bre -
Short and sweet like hershey's kisses, yet powerful. I loved your title, and your whole write was very beautiful. I wish I knew why people had to die, especially at a young age, and if I'm dead before you, goodbye. You're very talented, I can see just by reading this one write. Keep up the goodwork--Ann
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So touching I love the poem!!!
So short yet it says so much!!
I love the poem!!!
I am sorry and give u sympathy~
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Oh, how sad. You made me want to cry. This was very deep and somewhat calming to my soul.
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Aw the author's comment affected me more than the poem...but anyway...I think it was a very good poem. I love the line "Tell Me Why the Sea Gulls Cry" but in this case, I don't think it really fit. You were talking about "you" then "me" then all of a sudden you have one line about sea gulls. It would make more sense, maybe if you made it longer. But wow this was so deep and sad. Nice job.
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Oh my God, this was beautiful. I think we all want answers to these questions, and your portrayed that beautifully. I am so so sorry about all of your friends, if you ever need to talk, just drop me an IM. This was a beautiful piece, so full of emotion, beautifule job.
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I know about alot friends dying off...I relate all too well Stay strong! Everyone would want you to be...
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Awesome Poem
This was absolutely gorgeous. I loved the amount of emotion you tied up in such a small poem. Please keep up the good work, for all our enjoyment. -
Awww i like this
I like that it was short yet had a good message to get through. It makes you think and that's the best kind of poem It has a lot of emotion too. Awesome job and thank you so much for entering my contest but even more for deciding to share it at all
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wow, this really hit me...I'm speechless...It was so simple, but had such a profound meaning...it was beautiful.
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i now who you wrote this for.
la-la-la-la.
im bored.
applause cause your a friend
lee the kee -
A beautiful write, and as pozo said, if it is a tribute, it is a perfect one. I understand what you meant... it's a childhood curiosity developing into an older understanding of how things just have to be. Wonderful write... truly beyond your years.
Keep writing!
Kate
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This is a beautiful poem about the mortality of the world. I like it, especially the last stanza- this seems like a tribute Well done
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Um...I don't think I understand this piece...Sorry. Well, it sounded good
Always,
Jessica -
Touching
Hi,
This is certainly a sad and touching write my friend. Your words are haunting to say the least. The imagery was great and the flow was fluid. Thanks for sharing this wonderful write with me. Thank you for your comment on my write
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that is an awsome poem congrats it is very deep
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