MY loue must surely playne to others be,
when from my loues faire face at last I goe:
they need but looke and in my face wil see,
the light his countenance doth euer show
hath lit my face, and made it lykewise glow.
But when I from his presence forth am gone
and light no more from him to me doth flow,
that light is dimd which briefly from me shone.
Then once more dimme, and once more to him drawne,
I slowe my feete, which gladder farre would run.
And drawing here, I ioy to see the dawne
of him whose presence is mine onely Sun.
And so to wondrous day is turn'd my night,
as I am lit by is most glorious light.
Author notes
I greatly enjoyed writing this poem as part of a course in Renaissance literature. Instead of one essay, there was an option of writing something in the style of the authors we were studying - Sidney and Spenser. This sonnet is written using a Spenserian rhyme scheme. I've tried to make the spelling authentic to the time period as well, tracking down authentic spellings in Sidney or Spenser's works for most of the words I've used. It has a companion sonnet, which I've posted as "Elanor and Gabriel 2". The content is from my experience, expressed in Renaissance style.
Written October 15th, 2003
A contest entry
- Sonnets ONLY! by MargaretG.
350 points, ended June 3, 2004, 28 entries
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Thanks for the comments, Peaseeker, and for the typo notification. I've fixed it now. Sorry for the slowth of my reply, I haven't been on here in ages.
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Well done, I appreciate the research you have put into the archaic spellings. The metaphor of light and dark is also well developed in your metrical and well rhymed sonnet.
Do you have a typo at the beginning of line 5?
Thanks for entering my contest!
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Thanks, the spelling was definitely a fun part of writing it.
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top notch
Wow again, you're a great poet. i love how you've spelt things and the juxtapositioned structure of the words. -
Thanks, I'll check out Oldpoetry when I have time.
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I think you've done a grat job with this. You might enjoy a visit to Oldpoetry - here you can find both Sidney and Spencer to enjoy plus many other authors which may interst you.
Welcome to Allpoetry
~Von~
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